New upbeat tune...rip it up if you must!!

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Submitted for your approval, rough draft demo of a new song that I just wrote. Give it a listen and tell me the good and the bad.
DISCLAIMER!!!
If you are looking for screaming lyrics about hell and demons and idol worship and stuff then this is not the post for you!!!

Blessings
Mike

oh yeah, heres the link
www.nowhereradio.com/digangi/singles
the song is called "You Saved Me"
 
I really enjoyed this one Mike.I like the vocals AND lyrics especially....the lead guitar sounds good all the way through.The rhythm guitars sound pretty good too but could use a little of "something" to fit in the mix a little better.(I dont know how to get that "something" LOL)
Clean electric in the right side and acoustic in the left side?The bass tone you chose fits in pretty well also.Im not a mix guru but I do like it!It's got a good melody.I would have liked to have heard some harmony vocals.They would sound great on a song of this style and the way the melody is sung.

Dig it man!Good to see you back around the clinic!
 
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Nice song King. Very well arranged. The lead guitar is very tastefully done - perfect level - it's not overbearing.

I'd say the lead could use some subtle ambience though, to give it some space.
 
Thanks a lot my brothers...

Kramer: You are well respected in the neighborhood so I am always flattered when you give me a listen. Thanks for the comments . Everytime I listen to the song in my head I hear harmony vocals going on in there so I am right with you on that one. Should I have panned the acoustic and electrics differently??

Dimchandeliers: Thanx for the listen, I am gonna rework it a little this weekend and I will give the ambience on the lead a try. I think you are right on with that. Thanks for the tip.

Thanks
Mike
 
I liked it a lot Mike! Your recording is very clean sounding to me. Everything seemed to flow well in there..I'm thinking the lead guitar could use some fattening maybe, the playing is quite good, it just needs to take up more space.
About your disclaimer, It's probably a good thing but I didn't use one on my post. I figure the ones throwing the flames will be the ones feelin em in the end.

bd

oh, I just read the other posts...sorry for repeating.
 
Mike;

Great message and well sung and played. Recording was nice and clean. I think a touch of Verb on the lead would fatten it up some. Some Backing Vox really would be cool :cool:.

Blessings to ya, Bro!!!

CR ><>
 
Really nice playing of that lead! You got such a clean sound on it. Great lyrics and good message.

The only thing that bothered me about this production was the drums -- IMHO -- The programming was fine for the rough demo you are going for, but when you are getting ready to go for a more full-blown recording, it needs some variety ... :)

Otherwise, very nice job. Good playing, and great vocals!

:)
 
kewl

Loved the lead ryth. and bass. 1st-2nd verse lyrics were very nice...but I had to really listen. I'd jack up your vox in the beginning!
I am trying to place the rhythm and the bass...it's reminds me of somebody...damn it, I'll think of it in a minute.
BTW...you should've warned my about the cymbals (ouch)...was wearing my monitors!!!!
 
Hi KE

I like the song.
It's easy to listen to.
I didn't think the leed guitar sounded too thin.
I'd like to hear some female bkup vocals though.
Ask your wife.
If not you can ask my wife:)

Good song, well executed IMO.
 
one of the better recordings I've heard from you.. good tune.. yeah I agree the drums could have done a little more after 4:30 of the same beat with no fills, and I usually prefer a bit more idol worship in my music, but this was cool.. :)
 
Loved the rhythm gtrs and bass!! Great lead solo, think I heard a flat note here and there ( mine are alway's full of'em:) ). I agree some bg vox would sound great in this. I liked the drums, cymbals were some what harsh maybe. Vocals sounds good, would like to hear some more verb in them maybe. I like the tune a lot, keep rockin King!
 
King Elvis said:
Submitted for your approval, rough draft demo of a new song that I just wrote. Give it a listen and tell me the good and the bad.
DISCLAIMER!!!
If you are looking for screaming lyrics about hell and demons and idol worship and stuff then this is not the post for you!!!

Blessings
Mike

oh yeah, heres the link
www.nowhereradio.com/digangi/singles
the song is called "You Saved Me"
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move over stryper!

drop one of your cd's into the collection plate. bwahahahahah!!!
 
Re: Re: New upbeat tune...rip it up if you must!!

amazing_critic said:
move over stryper!

drop one of your cd's into the collection plate. bwahahahahah!!!
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God bless you Amazing_Critic, one thing he didnt give you is the gift of humor.
 
Nice tunage man.

Tastewise I find it far too simple but the recording is nice and the song is fluid.

There is one vocal pattern from 1:19 to 1:42 that needs a melody change up IMO.

"my life you began"
That one line more than others gets to me. I know you wouldn't say anything like that and to my ears it's a cheap rhyme.
I would ride the volume of the lead a bit to shine on the vocal a bit in places.

That's all from me.
Good job!
 
jake-owa said:
Nice tunage man.

Tastewise I find it far too simple but the recording is nice and the song is fluid.

There is one vocal pattern from 1:19 to 1:42 that needs a melody change up IMO.

"my life you began"
That one line more than others gets to me. I know you wouldn't say anything like that and to my ears it's a cheap rhyme.
I would ride the volume of the lead a bit to shine on the vocal a bit in places.

That's all from me.
Good job!
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The way I wrote the line was:
"You knew me before my life began"
the way I wound up singing it was
"You knew me before my life, it began"
I isnt so much a cheap rhyme as a cheap way to keep the flow going.
 
It's the ending the song in a verb to make a ryhme that sounds cheap to me. Sorry, it's something I've noticed and tried to stop in my own music.

If it has you feeling a flow then good.;)
 
HI Mike

I liked it. The vocal recording is really great and I am digging the acoustic guitar. Cool. Cheers for dropping into my challenge site to say hi. Thanks man.

Erland
 
I agree with Sam that this is the best quality of recording from you. Good job on the improvement. I thought the singing on this was good. Catchy enough tune.

Some suggestions. I liked the rhythm guitar. The part was perfect for the song. But it's a little thin sounding. Needs a little "umph." An EQ boost around 400hz maybe? Just a guess.

I also liked the tone of the lead guit - I wouldn't change that at all. There may be just a few too many licks spread through there. Some of them got a little repetitive.

Maybe find a few drum fills and paste them in?

Harmonies? Oh this song begs for harmonies. Tell me you'll do them? There are all kinds of spots. Do some "ahhs" in the verses, some nice three parts following the vocal lines in the chorus. It would bring a ton more life to the song.

Good to hear another one from you.
 
jake-owa said:
It's the ending the song in a verb to make a ryhme that sounds cheap to me. Sorry, it's something I've noticed and tried to stop in my own music.

If it has you feeling a flow then good.;)
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I really appreciate the feedback, nothing to be sorry about. I post em here so that I will get honest feedback like yours. This way I can grow as a musician, writer and recordist. That is a great tip and that is what I am looking for.

Thanks
Mike
 
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