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Thanks for the advice!Listening through "real world", high quality desktop speakers. Agree with the reverb comments. It makes your words indistinct. Try to move it to a dryer area. Right now it sounds like karaoke. Guitars are the same way. Maybe turn down the drum levels without doing anything else on the other tracks and see how it sounds. The tracks are just not "glued" together yet.
Well sung. I thought you set the mood in the song pretty well.
I thought the electric rhythm guitars were a bit thin and set far back in the mix. I'd like more power and crunch out of them.
I think I'd back off the reverb level on the vocals. They're pretty wet and that makes them a bit too indistinct.
There's a little clickiness in one or more drum samples. Gets a little distracting in spots.