New to site, first song, "Stand Alone" (partial)

[grongy]

Hey just started to the site was wondering if i coud get some comments on my first song it's only a couple of verses

STAND ALONE

I’m here waiting for your sympathy
I’m here wasting all my energies, and
I don’t,
No, I don’t
Need this shit anymore

I’ll stand alone
I’ll face this world on my own
I’ll stand alone

I’ll wish you had never gone away
I’ll wait but it’s never coming true
I won’t
No, I won’t
But then again I will

I’ll stand alone
I’ll face this world on my own
I’ll stand alone

 

[true-eurt]

I'd like to hear it set to music...I like it ....What type of music are you writing for? The sh@# part seems to take away from rest you've written....I mean, it's just that sh@# seems alienated from your other forms of expression.....Of course, that is just my own opinion...I do like your song .

 

[true-eurt]

I don't know why no one else has commented on your song.....there are those more expertise than I here.. ..maybe they'll show up soon...sorry... ...but Welcome....!!!!!

 

[Tifstorey]

Welcome to HR

The lyrics sound good, i would like to hear it with music because it would be interesting to find out the style you wrote it to. Like true-eurt said, i think the 'shit' seems a little weird, but then again, i dont know what style youve wrote it to. Could be that it sounds great with music behind it!

Good job!