Your levels are a bit uneven, you could use compression to level things out a bit. The drums are way too far back, they need to be up front with your vocal on a tune like this. I'm not a fan of the guitar tone. Personal opinion but it's too thin and harsh for my liking. I'm not hearing much (any?) bass. Hopefully all that's not too critical. The song itself has a lot of promise and good energy, just the mix and sound selection could do with a tickle up
