Hey all!
It's only what I got up to tonight... (its nearly 3am, so buggered) so it's not finished... but its enough to get some feedback on. I just want to know if its sounding alright... I still don't like my voice, but I believe it sounds a lot better than in the last song I recorded (that was in a key that wasn't comfortable for me) ...
So yeah.
Probably the most poppy song I've made, but hopefully it doesn't come across too much as pop.
www.soundclick.com/danielcartisano
"Me and You"
you say, you say, we are moving further apart, away from your heart.
every time I wake up, wake up, I'm feeling like a tragic story, emotions blowing every spark
everything you tell me, already I know
just having trouble forking out the feelings I owe
all I ever want to do
is pick up all the pieces that you leave behind
that join together, forming a picture
of me and you
its all I ever knew
one day, one day, I'll take you to a place that I call home
so you can see how broken, broken, my life has become with all these thoughts making me feel numb
everything you tell me, already I know
just having trouble forking out the feelings I owe
all I ever want to do
is pick up all the pieces that you leave behind
that join together, forming a picture
of me and you
its all I ever knew
(more lyrics, but I haven't finished recording yet)
Let me know what you guys think, and if I'm on the right track!
Thanks!!
Daniel
It's only what I got up to tonight... (its nearly 3am, so buggered) so it's not finished... but its enough to get some feedback on. I just want to know if its sounding alright... I still don't like my voice, but I believe it sounds a lot better than in the last song I recorded (that was in a key that wasn't comfortable for me) ...
So yeah.
Probably the most poppy song I've made, but hopefully it doesn't come across too much as pop.
www.soundclick.com/danielcartisano
"Me and You"
you say, you say, we are moving further apart, away from your heart.
every time I wake up, wake up, I'm feeling like a tragic story, emotions blowing every spark
everything you tell me, already I know
just having trouble forking out the feelings I owe
all I ever want to do
is pick up all the pieces that you leave behind
that join together, forming a picture
of me and you
its all I ever knew
one day, one day, I'll take you to a place that I call home
so you can see how broken, broken, my life has become with all these thoughts making me feel numb
everything you tell me, already I know
just having trouble forking out the feelings I owe
all I ever want to do
is pick up all the pieces that you leave behind
that join together, forming a picture
of me and you
its all I ever knew
(more lyrics, but I haven't finished recording yet)
Let me know what you guys think, and if I'm on the right track!
Thanks!!
Daniel