new piece - ashtray =)

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I usually put my songs in 'rock/metal'
but i also do electronic so,,
plz tell me what you think and be honnest please =)

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I liked it...very cool sound..good playing

Id have the drums far far louder in the mix...in fact, I know you're not genre specific, I think they should be right up there with the guitar..the bass should be pounding

once it got into the meat of the tune it flows along nicely (drums are still MIA)..Id also say at 7+ minutes its too long which makes it sound a little self indulgent..if you could cut it back, maybe by getting to the meat of the song quicker, you'd keep the listener with you

but drums, drums, drums...they are the bain of my life too..at least yours only need some volume imo ;)

BTW the guys here...great with drums :)
 
Wow.. I am a fan. I hated the drums in the first section and wanted them to die but the rest of the song.. just bad ass. I don't know if it's just a style thing but I really enjoyed this. Very well done IMO.
 
WOW.. listening to other songs on your site.. I AM a fan. There are little nits I could pick but overall I dig your style.
 
I usually have a hard time connecting with "electronic" elements in music but this was a very interesting piece of music.

Not trying to step on your artistic vision or anything, but why no vocals? I kept hearing a distant, haunting vocal in my head.
 
The first part reminds me This Love by Cocteau Twins... I didn't like the drums, specially the kick, it's like half electronic half real. Anyway, the mix is very good...

Good Job.
 
kcearl said:
I liked it...very cool sound..good playing

Id have the drums far far louder in the mix...in fact, I know you're not genre specific, I think they should be right up there with the guitar..the bass should be pounding

once it got into the meat of the tune it flows along nicely (drums are still MIA)..Id also say at 7+ minutes its too long which makes it sound a little self indulgent..if you could cut it back, maybe by getting to the meat of the song quicker, you'd keep the listener with you

but drums, drums, drums...they are the bain of my life too..at least yours only need some volume imo ;)

BTW the guys here...great with drums :)
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I actually completely disagree on the drums. With this mix as sparse as it is, the drums are plenty loud.

I was a little thrown off between the 1:15 and 2:00 marks when the drums kick in. They don't seem to be sitting well with the guitars time-signature wise.

When they come back in around 3:00, they're good.

Overall, the song makes good ambient background noise. I was programming as I listened, so I enjoyed it.

Edit: By the way, your second link is broken.
 
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thank you all!

first, about the link, ill fix it its a letter
im surprised no one said nothing about the ending, im not satisfied with its crunchiness =/

I tried to do some minor changes with the drums but its really hard
cause they sit so perfect in my ears that im afraid to touch it after several days of mastering this mix, generally, i stilll have lot of work on this track,
 
ziv said:
first, about the link, ill fix it its a letter
im surprised no one said nothing about the ending, im not satisfied with its crunchiness =/

I tried to do some minor changes with the drums but its really hard
cause they sit so perfect in my ears that im afraid to touch it after several days of mastering this mix, generally, i stilll have lot of work on this track,
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Ziv Id go with the general consensus..its only me that thinks they are too quiet and my monitors aren't the best..I gave the track another listen and they still seem too quiet...maybe Im going deaf :( :)

listened to a few of the others...you have a great deal of talent...lucky man!
 
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