New Original: A work in progress...

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Hi friends...

I just kinda got thru with a new original that is not exactly finished yet. Please give a listen and give me some of your great feedback on how I can improve this.

www.nowhereradio.com/digangi/singles

Its called "The One That Is"

Thanks Mucho!!!
The King
 
Hey King:

This is only the second thing I've heard of yours...VERY different from your last post, and I like the vibe a ton. Man, that almost sounds like a Telecaster on the lead...but I KNOW a rocker like you doesn't have a tele, right?

I can't comment on any lyrical content because of my present location...but I'll get to it later. Not that I care, but you probably will need to add a couple of drum fills to appease those who do.

:D

Ya' know, when it started, I almost instinctively started singing..."OHHHH...IT DON'T COME EASY...YA' KNOW IT DON'T COME EASY"

Not that it sounds like that, because it doesn't...I just need more medication.

Cool "start"...I'll be back later.
-chris
 
It is a Tele copy...I have a Strat that didnt not get any service on this tune, A Yamaha Pacifica, which is a Tele copy and an Epiphone SJ-200 Acoustic which is their version of the Gibson J-200
 
I thought this was a pretty nice piece of music. The instruments all sat well together. I really liked the lead riff. I liked all the guitars for that matter.

It seemed you had a bit of trouble with the vocals. Some of the low notes had trouble coming through - it was as if you couldn't get the volume needed. I thought that you have some opportunity to really belt out sections of the song to create some more dynamics. A slight pitch issue or two.
 
Thanks Triple M
I had the song completed in the morning and some glitch happened with my Vs880 and I lost the whole damn song and had to start over. I liked the vocal on the original better. I was sick yesterday which gave the the time to finish writing and recording the song I want to add some vocal harmonies and maybe redo the vocal. Thanks for the nod to the guitars, The POD is working out well for me. Really appreciate it!!
 
Cool man.A heartfelt song about THE Lord.I used to write a lot of Christian music before I got depressed and...oh nevermind that.:confused:

This is a good tune with a nice lyrics.I like the tele sound...some harmony vocals would sound good on the chorus.The drums sound pretty solid too.

Nice work in progress Mike.
 
the chord progression is nice....i can really see what chris is saying about "it don't come easy"...i love that song......anyhow, the song is good right now, but some backing and or soaring vocals could push it over the top.....your singing low enough that belting could kick it up a notch..........some nice harmonies starting halfway through could help..........it sounds good......
 
I'd like to be appeased...
with the drum fills, please ... :D (can that be in a song, or in the stand-up routine???)

I would try speed it up ... and raise the key .... "the One that is and is to come" lines are asking for harmonies with oohs and aahs in between them... :) maybe... well... something to try... :) ...
good subject to sing about ... for sure ...
hm... needs more things to break the monotony of it though ...
cheers
 
king,

wow, this sounds great... esp. for a vs880 recording. Your skills are improving tremendously :) Not much to do in the way of EQ imhop...

On the phrase "come take my ha-and" for example (around 2:40) the vocal drops out... happens a few other times.

I may just be paranoid, but it seems like just the D string on your tele is tuned sharp?

Cool stuff for something you just COMPLETELY REDID THIS MORNING :) :mad: And I'm still workin' on this one song... and have been for a loooooong time :mad: :D (started off on a VS880 4 years ago... just a piece of a song... finally getting close to finishing it -- using only a COUPLE of the original VS880 tracks, in Cubase)

Gotta borrow a bit of your mojo or somethin, since you can whip these babys out so fast :D


Thanks for the listen

Chad
 
participant...
Make no mistake about it, I am not able to whip these things out. I wish I could. I never think that my stuff is worth a damn and I am always looking for advice to make the recordings sound better. I dont post my stuff here to go "hey...look at me!!" I do it so that you guys can give me pointers so that I can constantly make better recordings. I do mostly covers and have never really wrote my own stuff until the fine folks on here would tell me...covers are fine, but where is YOUR stuff at!!! I appreciate the great comments and I am really interested now to get a listen to that song you have been working on.
 
i concur with chad i hear an outta tune string to??....now if this was me.....i would capo this and sing it in a key that doesnt drop your voice down so much....its not bad by any means and maybe thats how you intended it...just an idea..???

this is quite the departure from your last post..lol..do youo have a version with the kick-butt guitar lead lines runnin throughout??....naa....just kiddin...i didnt find anything glaringly wrong with the mix ...your vox are so low it would be hard to bring them up ...not that they needed it much...i missed what sorta guitar your playing..?..i like the "jangly-ness"..lol to it..

nice
jamal
 
Good song. The mix sounds good and I like your singing on this.

My only feedback really might be songwise. Have you thought about maybe adding a bridge to this, or maybe at some point bumping it up to another key? It seems like it just needs something a bit more, especially for being a long song. I like your lyrics and the style but I would like to hear where you might be able to take it -- imhop -- Don't want to sound harsh cause' I really like it, but would just like to hear it go somewhere musically (lyrically you're there)

Overall nice job
 
nice tune, for sure. But.....it sounds like you're not 100% comfortable with your Tele part. It IS the right part, but the playing seems a little stiff to me. The vocals need to come up and slap some "room" around it, for sure. ..waaaay to dry. Your Tele buzzes a little on the low notes too. They'd kill ya in Nashville for that!!:eek:
Drums are ok...just ok..but need some variation. It is same all the way thru. Same with the jangly guitars. Use them with some production.

Nice tune...yeah...nice tune
 
Hey King,

Good start. I'd throw some spice, emotion, variance into the vocal melody. It kinda drones away after a while.

I liked the rhythm gits on both sides. The rhythm section could use a new element as the song goes on. Keys or something.......

That snare starts to grate on the ears after two minutes of it or so. Mix it up some.

I'd maybe play that bass note git run in a higher position in some spots and lay some texture fills softly in the mix.

Right now, my attention wasn't maintain but, that is why you posted (to get ideas on filling it out). The tune will benefit from the additions you make.

Good luck,

Theron.
 
As always, all of your comments are very well appreciated. This is kinda the first mix of the tune. I just set a beat on the Zoom Machine and let it go, hence no fills. I am definately gonna work on that vocal and the drums. I always like to throw up the first draft and see how you guy will improve it for me...thanks as always...
mixmkr, you never told me...is that your Jack Russell??

consistantly better recordings in high fidelity sound!!!
The King
 
King Elvis said:
mixmkr, you never told me...is that your Jack Russell??
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of course!;) He's a great swimmer too. He loves to lay on my feet when I record. I like that.
 
whats his name??

I used to have a minature schnauzer and he would sit right at my feet as soon as I started to play...he was a great audience.
 
I miss my Jack Russel... his name was Mutley...

I loved the tele lines.. especially that low kinda glassy open string. So what if they shoot people in Nashville, I liked the buzz...

POD eh? That just makes my modeling search back square one, damnit....

Arrangement wise, it's pretty static. I"m sure a lot of that has to do with the drum track... I can hear this one starting off with just acoustic or maybe acoustic and jangly guitar building to bass, drums, lead lines, and harmonized choruses. What is the multiple of choruses? chorusi? I don't know... anywho...
 
I like it. Good tune and like everyone else I like the Tele and also like everyone else I'm waiting for a little more to be added. Needs some harmonies and I think you should really consider bumping it up a step. Sounds a little too low for your voice. Nice tune though. ;)
 
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