Just to see what it sounded like, I think I'd:
* bring that backing rhythm guitar up a bit - 2 dB?
* reduce that louder guitar on the left when the vocal comes in - 1 dB?
* 0.47-1.16, that louder left guitar just disappears during the chorus - it really sounds like something's missing, so maybe...
a) don't axe the part, keep it going
b) bring it back in sooner (for example, at 1.01)
c) add a slower strummed part on the first beat of each bar (that's what I'd do - it would slow the feel down without creating that 'instrument gap')
* whack a ton of voodoo on the vocal - 'telephone' it, for example, or some parallel distortion
Good tune, BP.