My first song! :) Have a listen!

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Hey everyone! A couple weeks ago I put a finished song up on youtube. It's a love song, for my girlfriend :). A lot of effort went into this, over two months of hard work! :P So, here's the link - YouTube - Homesick (Brandi's Song) Let me know what you think!

The song is called Homesick (Brandi's Song)

I did EVERYTHING on this song; keyboard, guitar, singing, lyrics, everything!

Let me know what you think! :)
 
There are some nice elements captured here but.... It still sounds very rough. The vocal is way too low and more attention needs to be paid to staying in tune. I really don't know what is happening with the drum sounds? Could you strip this back to the the accoustic sounds, work round a click track and spend some more time on the vocal?
Luck
 
Still needs work dude, vocals are too pitchy to pass. Timing is very loose. The vocal recording sounds distant and I hear bass pops. Try doing a faster tempo song with a melody you can stay closer to in pitch, this composition (which may be decent) just seems to hard for you to pull off right now. Thanks for posting, welcome to HR.
 
You should find a venue for hosting other than YouTube... doesn't exactly show it off to its best effect, especially as it's not actually a video...

What the other guys said. It's also too long, way too long IMHO... sounds like you're trying to cram everything you've ever done into one song to impress your girlfriend... simplify...
 
Jordazjc, the guitar line is nice, but the song needs to be halved in length, at least. Turn up the vocals, but practise singing them a bit more before you re-record them.

Good luck. :)
 
I just noticed your 16, so I appologize if my critique was a bit strong. As long as you like playing, keep at it. Great your writing songs.
 
The audio quality is pretty good for YT I think. I think the reverb is a bit over done, and it's not matching the drums. If you're mixing this, try and put everything closer together. Definitely more presence on the vocals. Lead vocals, drums and lead instruments (during solos) should be close in volume and ride highest in the mix. I like the changes in instruments which you play as it progresses, nice variety. Has a nice bit of Beatles feel from the 60's at the guitar solo towards the end...and that's where the solos should sit.
 
your vocal recording is no good...or you used a reverb with way too big of room size. Turn your vocals UP. I could not hear them at all, try overdubs on your vocal recordings, I think it would sound good with your voice. And dont use youtube for broadcasting your music...use soundcloud...much better and maintains a lot better quality..but anyways keep doing your thing.
 
Pretty good

Love the introduction. It really grabs your attention.
Vocal sounds a bit sketchy both in terms of tuning and in where it is in the mix. It's way too quiet compared to the guitar. And the bass is really loud, especially panned to the left speaker.
Have you thought about using some more gentle percussion like a tambourine instead of a drum kit.
Other than that, the guitars and synths sound great. Sounds a bit like a Killers tune.
Keep at it, dude.
 
Great start for your first song.
A few thoughts:
1) edit down to 3 minutes
2) work on your vocals - they have potential but try some vocal exercises to help you stay on key (youtube has tons)
3) write a clear arrangement for the song

keep at it! -
PS - my wife says it sounds like Bowie (thats a good thing)
 
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