doesnt sound too bad for your first recording... my firsts were god awful... anyway if i were you, i would spread out some of the sound with panning... if theres 5 guitar tracks put a few on left and right, add some reverb to the guitar and some compression if u havent already.... your vocals sound nice but i think they could be turned down just a tiny bit, also i got lost in the guitar part in the beginning so try to make a clear cut melody or tune that will make ur music stand out more... good luck with the rest of your recording and most of all... have fun
