Well, I listened to both. The second was is an improvement - the cymbals are less harsh. The mix is very loud as someone else pointed out (first one louder than the second too), which makes me think one of two things. Either you limited it a bunch during mixing, but you didn't mention this, or maybe your overheads are clipping your mic pres. That might explain the harshness in the cymbals. Zoom in on the waveforms at look at the peaks. If they look chopped off on top, that might be the culprit. I think the kick drum still sounds like cardboard, I'd give it a little boost around 80Hz or so.
Ben