Multnomah Now! - Indie Pop/Folk. Tell me what I did wrong and right.

[cominginsecond]

Hi everyone,

This is the first Mp3 I've submitted to the brutal criticism that this board has to offer. Here's a link to a list of the equipment in my studio: http://www.cominginsecond.com/equipment.txt.

Here's the link to the song:

It's called "Multnomah Now!" and my solo project's name is "The Very Most." (at least this week.) I played everything on this song except for the cello and the flute. I'd especially be interested in hearing from fans of Belle and Sebastian, Brian Wilson, and Doug Martsch for this song, although I'd love any feedback you're willing to give.

 

[Stratomaster]

Sounds great-(brutal criticism?)-Everything is sitting well and theres alot going on-really nice arranging-flutes glockenspiels-swirling echoey stuff-goes perfectly with this puddles setting on my real player! Vocals are sitting right on top of the mix just right-groovy song man-I really can't think of anything wrong sound wise or song/arrangement wise---Except for that drum faux pas around the 2:00 mark-it kind of crushed the illusion for a few seconds--why dont you do something creative there? put a huge verb and/or echo or something to cover that up(or just do it again ) But sounds like you put alot of work into this-a very enjoyable listen.

 

[chrisharris]

Hi there...this rules, and there's tons of good stuff here, so keep that in mind when I mention the next couple of subjective things. The reverb on your voice takes the tune down a notch...it's one of those "small room" reverb pre-set sounds that sounds like you recorded a vocal in an untreated room. It instantly tells me this is a home recording. (harsh enough??).

The drum thing...it actaully sounds in time to me...just totally out of place in its current state.

PET SOUNDS was brilliant. I like this a lot - fix those 2 things and I'm your biggest fan.

 

[cominginsecond]

The reverb on your voice takes the tune down a notch...it's one of those "small room" reverb pre-set sounds that sounds like you recorded a vocal in an untreated room.

Actually, it's not a reverb. It's kind of a faux-delay (I cloned the vocal track and scooted one of them down maybe 50 mS.) I'll definitely think about your recommendation there.

The drum thing...it actaully sounds in time to me...just totally out of place in its current state.

I kind of agree with you here. I didn't like it at first either, but its clumsiness kind of grew on me. I'll have to revisit that.

Thanks, both of you, for your kind words and suggestions.

 

[Kramer]

Really good job on this tune man.There's a LOT of stuff going on and it's all making it through the mix just fine.I have trouble getting 3 elements to sit right in a mix....this is really good.Oh,I said that already.You might wanna add a little reverb to the Vocal.Not much jut enough to bring it out of that dry room sound that the cloned delay track is creating.Do you have the vocal tracks panned hard right and left?

Nice job.

 

[cominginsecond]

You might wanna add a little reverb to the Vocal.Not much jut enough to bring it out of that dry room sound that the cloned delay track is creating.

I added a little more reverb and it sounded good. Thanks!

 

[W.I.S.C.]

Listening thru my headphones the mix sound a littl uneven one of the guitars is pinned left/right and it makes it a little wierd,the vocals sound deadened by something not airy enough...did you say "barter my soul for a coupon"...?(Giggle)
Overall interesting and consistent enough to warrant further intrest from me...excellent 1st post!!!Your music will flourish here.

 

[cominginsecond]

Listening thru my headphones the mix sound a littl uneven one of the guitars is pinned left/right and it makes it a little wierd

I see what you mean. The Acoustic was panned on center and an electric was panned right. I panned the Acoustic more to the left and this improved it.

did you say "barter my soul for a coupon"...?(Giggle)

Yeah, the line goes "I gotta know, do you want me to barter my soul for a coupon that says 'You don't need to worry anymore.'" When I wrote that line, I was kind of thinking of people who are willing to do things that no kind, decent people should ever even consider doing, as their job, because it pays well and it means financial security. Kind of a goofy way to make my point.

the vocals sound deadened by something not airy enough

I see what you're saying. I was boosting the vocal at about 8K, and I moved the peak up to 15K, with a Q of about 1.4. This sounded better to me.

excellent 1st post!!!Your music will flourish here.

Thanks!

 

[Toki987]

i`ll get ya tune ASP. I`m on 56k so I have to ration my time for downloading.