This is my latest original song. I just wanted to get some feedback on it as Im just starting to perform it at open mics to get the kinks out. Its a rough recording, just looking for comments on the songwriting/ arrangement. If you have any ideas for instrumentation/ production please share those too, as I am hoping to record the keeper version soon.
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VERSE:
I simply can't explain,
how theres something I've refrained,
from giving up till now
First words become a page,
that fills the chapter with your name.
Its ink is barely dry
PRECHORUS
I cannot say this quite enough,
but I simply can't give this up.
Its not enough, but its all to much for now....
CHORUS:
You struck a chord with me somehow,
and Im now quite sure what that means right now,
so I'll sit right here and get this down cause you see...
I'm not quite sure when this will all come back to me
VERSE:
Notes hang in time and space
Each one its rightful place
Describe more than we could say.
Plucked from his mind's embrace
as if in a grand escape
from the edge of reality
PRECHORUS:
Im sure I can't have made this up
cause Im not quite sure where you came from
Its not enough but its all too much for now
CHORUS
Instrumental Bridge
CHORUS
Im not quite sure when this will all come back
Yes Im not quite sure when this will all come back
Im not quite sure if this will all come back.....
To me.
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Thanks for your feedback!
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VERSE:
I simply can't explain,
how theres something I've refrained,
from giving up till now
First words become a page,
that fills the chapter with your name.
Its ink is barely dry
PRECHORUS
I cannot say this quite enough,
but I simply can't give this up.
Its not enough, but its all to much for now....
CHORUS:
You struck a chord with me somehow,
and Im now quite sure what that means right now,
so I'll sit right here and get this down cause you see...
I'm not quite sure when this will all come back to me
VERSE:
Notes hang in time and space
Each one its rightful place
Describe more than we could say.
Plucked from his mind's embrace
as if in a grand escape
from the edge of reality
PRECHORUS:
Im sure I can't have made this up
cause Im not quite sure where you came from
Its not enough but its all too much for now
CHORUS
Instrumental Bridge
CHORUS
Im not quite sure when this will all come back
Yes Im not quite sure when this will all come back
Im not quite sure if this will all come back.....
To me.
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Thanks for your feedback!