Leave me

[sikter]

This one seemed to flat and too boring so I had no idea how to make it more interesting (more enjoyable).
So I added a guitar solo and different drum track at the end of song.
Solo is not nice. It’s just preliminary "impro" until I decide how to arrange the finale version.
Mix is rough too and this is my first mix with new Adobe Audition (version 2.0)
Vocals are borrowed. The drum is only one single loop. I promise to replace it with real drums.
This is still baby in the cradle so any suggestion will be appreciated.

“Leave Me” is on the top of the page:
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/pagemusic.cfm?bandID=510525

sikter

 

[XLR]

I like the lead guitar a lot, and the organ. I bet an acoustic guitar would sound good on the arpeggiated right guitar part. Any way to make the bass guitar fatter?

Tim

 

[aspiring]

I'm voting for some kind of modern-day retro synth thing poking in there in a couple of places. Otherwise you'll end up with a guitar wall.

As for the completely new song starting at 3:00

It's tough to judge when the whole song sounds exotic because of your cool language

Good luck with it
aspiring

 

[DavidK]

Sounds pretty good. I would suggest turning up the lead vocal a hair, not that I could understand. It probably tells a story and I am guessing you need it loud and clear.

I like the song and the ambience. The organ is pretty cool.

 

[ido1957]

Cool tune sikter - another good one by our European friend!

Cool lead guitar throughout this tune. Good variety of tones to keep it interesting and nice riffs.

The organ sounds great!

Nice vocals and nice vocal sound! Can tell us what microphone you are using?

The fade out and fade back in at the end was "interesting"

I think I'll take a break now and just listen to all your tunes......

 

[sikter]

@Tim
Bass can and WILL be fatter I promise! Acoustic guitar is an idea I was thinking of in the first place.
It will probably find place on one of the next versions but right now I can’t record it because of baby in the house.

@aspiring
It probably sounds like I mixed another song at the end of it. (I took a shot)
I have to find the way of breaking songs monotony ( I don’t know it will stay that way)

@DavidK
You are kind as always. Thank you for support.
I expected organ being criticized because I play keyboards clumsy and this sample is 20 years old.
It came from my Korg M1.
I recorded it DI and did not put any effects to it.
I’ll turn vocal up.

@Ido1957
Take your seat fast!
Vocal is borrowed and guy who sang used cheap headset for recording.
He sent me mp3 and I cleaned noises and other unwanted stuff.
(We will do it properly on the finale version)
He was totally out of the pitch on the first verse and came to it after a while.
Fade out and in at the end was me joking with him but after he said he liked it a lot I decided to keep it that way.

Thank you guys!
You can also hear me singing the same song (you don’t have to )
I uploaded a clip of it. Link is my signature.

 

[Fishmed]

I have to find the way of breaking songs monotony ( I don’t know it will stay that way)

What if you brought the song up a half step on the last verse? That might give it a more dramatic feel.

I would bring the organ down a little or change its sound to one that does not have such a high end pitch to it. I think the vocals sound good in the mix. Can't wait to hear the final version.

 

[sikter]

What if you brought the song up a half step on the last verse? That might give it a more dramatic feel.

I would bring the organ down a little or change its sound to one that does not have such a high end pitch to it. I think the vocals sound good in the mix. Can't wait to hear the final version.

Thank you, Fishmed Returns!
I took your suggestion seriously and made a new version.
I have to admit I cheated. Didn't actually have a time to do it properly so I just transposed my tracks and clip, cut, paste, bla bla here we go.
It was easiest for me to transpose first part down (1/2 step) and I had to sing first part my self

I fucked it in few places but it doesn't matter.
I'll do it properly one day.
sikter