Just wanted to post a song.....

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..because I have nothing else to do. I don't have any recording gear yet, so I can't really post very much more than just lyrics, but that will soon change. This one is a depressing merge of two seperate songs that I wrote a very long time ago. Hope you like it.

Come with me

-verse-
I'm pale in a world of color.
I'm dark under the sun.
Wandering through the shadows
you always come undone.

-pre chorus-
so come with me
we'll go
so far away
and we'll never.....we'll never come back.

We'll spend everyday
together with
out any pain
I finally figured it out
The answer is you

-chorus lyrics aren't written yet, but the melody and structure are-

-piano and guitar solo thing that is really pretty and written!-

-verse 2-
I'm silent in a world of laughter
I'm dirty, shattered and sick
Why do we even bother
These pieces will never fit

-pre chorus again-
-the infamous chorus the doesn't exist again-
 
Quite promising, in a wrist slashing sort of way. Chorus needs to take it somewhere else, when you get round to writing one. Lyrics on their own don't mean a great deal, however, (poetry department's 2 floors down, other side of the building, past the coffee machine).

All the best

Garry
 
ya, I know. Posting lyrics sucks ass because without the melody it really is nothing more than peotry and it really doesn't do it justice at all...that's why I hardly ever comment on lyrics alone (I just post mine up and expect people to comment). I remeber looking at it last night before I posted it and the verse looks so short, but when the song is sang it really doesn't need to be any longer....anyways...thanks for commenting...
 
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