January Challenge - Just under deadline

[up-fiddler]

Here is a link to my entry.

I have had this stupid cold since I returned from the southlands. I kept waiting for my voice to heal but it hasn't yet. This morning I ended up singing this rather freestyle to emulate the sound I was going for so you can get the idea. I will rerecord the vox and kick again in the near future. For now I am sick of working on it. I don't remeber putting this much time into a rough draft for a long time. Everything that could go wrong did. Ah well......it could always be worse. I look forward to your thoughts and ideas. Dave

 

[SEDstar]

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Hmmm...

real different approach, I see.

went for the "really strong hook" school of thought.

kind of folk-sy, almost "novelty song" approach. Are you SURE you didn't have a one hit wonder in the 80's somewhere along the line? lol...

good production...

I dont know how to critique a song like this. Its just "fun". Which is maybe the whole point... he's showing us a song doesnt have to be complex, have hidden highbrow lyrical meaning, nor anything complex seeming about the musical content...

its just plain, folksy, novelty, "fun". I think he's reminding us all we dont need complex meaningful lyrics, complicated virtuoso arrangemnts and performances... just a sense of "fun".

I can dig that.

 

[Whatmysay]

I like this approach; it reminds me of the way that the tow truck Mater in ‘Cars’ moves. The beat and the riff (like changing gears with a worn clutch) are jumpy and agitated and the prosody suits the lyric beautifully. The first listen was very jarring, but by the third listen I was hooked.

Definitely in novelty song zone, but it could be more. The final verse could do with a slightly different arrangement to move it to a slightly more reflective mood, prior to launching into the craziness of the final verse/outro.

I’d be inclined to keep the foot drum going all the way through particularly in ‘It didn’t go fast and it never went far’ – just to give a little more cohesion, unless you really want the jarring effect of the rhythm.

I’d love to hear a different sound choice for the second guitar, as the ‘fuzz’ is a little too much for me on both riffs, perhaps pan them wider to distinguish them better.

This is a great realization of your song and sounds fantastic