J'ai Rien - new to producing, would love comments and crits!

[jairien]

Hello there,

A little about myself, I'm completely new to producing (jan 2011) but had been in a band for around a year until things turned sour, after getting bored with stale guitar music I got into more electronic influenced music and have started producing my own electronic/indie music under the name J'ai Rien

I'd love it if you could give me some feedback on my track called 'Barcelona'
Thank you!

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[RAMI]

"J'ai Rien", which translates to "I got nothing".

Not my kind of music, but I guess the sounds are ok. The one thing I would say is that those hand claps really throw the beat off. I think I developed a twitch in my left eye because of the jerky-ness they create in the beat.

 

[JimmyS1969]

Mmmmm..Jerky..... My eye is twitching a bit too. Maybe put it back in mix a bit. Sounds nice tho otherwise.

 

[dobro]

Nice. Yeah, the hand claps sound idiosyncratic but I can hear what you're trying to do with them, so I'm thinking maybe the issue is the kick - it sounds like it rushes the beat at one point. How'd you program it? Great vocal and crazy wonderful bvs or sample or synth sound or whatever it is. On a tune this gentle, are you sure you want the kick to be so present? Try cutting it back a bit - do the hand claps work better?

 

[ido1957]

The timing is off, and it makes it too hard to listen to this song. My advice....get a good (i.e. simple) loop and stick with it. Focus on the other stuff - which is your case is working good.

 

[cobaltaudio]

I totally get the hand claps actually, but I agree they might fit better if they are straightened out a bit time-wise. Bit more vocals maybe, and maybe brighten them up a touch?

 

[jairien]

Cheers for all the comments, taking them on board and looking at making something new with it all in mind

Thank you!

 

[kcearl]

Yup nice little tune and I can hear the atmosphere you are going for but the beat's off putting and the kick is too prominent..Id guess one with more click would suit this

Id keep the beat simple as youve got all the makings of a great tune and it doesnt need a gimmic...I loved the cut up loop and your vocals are great

my guess is that with such a limited experience so far yet producing this quality already you're going to go far, just watch those beats..until you have experience in making them dont spoil such nice work by over complicating it

welcome aboard

 

[jairien]

Glad to be here!

I really appreciate a forum where people have real expertise and valid comments because you are EXACTLY right that the kick is too prominent.

Thanks again everyone, should have a new song by next week too!

 

[heatmiser]

Yup, that beat is just not doing you any fovors here. The kick is coming in too early and just throwing the whole thing off. How did you play along with that? It's odd, cause everything else sounds pretty together.

It sounds like you have a good voice, but it isn't featured enough.

I like the other sounds a lot. If there was any way you could ditch that beat entirely and replace with something subtler and simpler, then remix - I think you might have something.

 

[jairien]

The drums have really been the thing people have commented on - soon as I can find some time I think a remix is in order as the drums were the part I spent the least time on, it certainly shows on reflection

With regards to the vocals, this was never going to be a massive vocal song but after a listen to it in the car I felt I was waiting a bit long for them to kick in - it's so true that giving tracks a few days to mellow yields results!