It's my first time

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It's my first time
© 2013 Irwin Abrigo
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(1st Verse)
I wish I had someone
To call me on the phone
I wish I had someone
To drive me home
Want Romeo to come
And take my hands
I'll be your Juliet
In a wild romance
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(Pre Chorus)
We will have so much to say
many happy day
I will be your girl
we will tour the world
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(Chorus)
I want to fall in love
I want love in return
I need my first kiss
You teach and I will learn
I never heard love is a crime
Want someone who's kind
Cause it's my first time
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Just like sugar and spice

I heard it feels so good

I want it to be nice

Cause it's my first time
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(2nd Verse)
When ever I go out
And I am in a crowd
See guys I'd like to date
But I'm so proud
Wish I had a true love
Right from the start
Someone to tell me things
That comes from the heart

(Pre Chorus
Ask me how I spent my day
Have so much to say
I will be your girl
We will tour the world
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(Chorus)
I want to fall in love
I want love in return
I need my first kiss
You teach and I will learn
I never heard love is a crime
Want someone who's kind
Cause it's my first time
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Just like sugar and spice

I heard it feels so good

I want it to be nice

Cause it's my first time
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(Bridge)
I'm waiting
For Mr. Right
To come and Look into my eyes
Then I'll say
my search is done
He is the one
He's the one
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(Chorus)
I want to fall in love
I want love in return
I need my first kiss
You teach and I will learn
I want to know what love is like
From someone who's kind
Cause it's my first time
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Just like sugar and spice

I heard it feels so good

I want it to be nice

Cause it's my first time


(Out)
It's my first time

It's my first time
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Captain2003
 
I like it - good story and the meter is easy to find.
 
I dunno - guys typically can't write 'as a girl' - ask some females what they think and they are most likely going to laugh/giggle, or at least tell you that is not the way they look at things.
 
mjbphotos said:
I dunno - guys typically can't write 'as a girl' - ask some females what they think and they are most likely going to laugh/giggle, or at least tell you that is not the way they look at things.
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Yeh, I'm a girl and I have to agree with that. I think it's probably true for both sexes and I think it is especially true if it is a love song.

I'm thinking of Green is the Colour by Pink Floyd, if David Gilmour had sung 'I' instead of 'she/her' it would have been quite a strange song. LOL.

It's not that I don't like the sentiment of the lyrics. I just think if you're writing about someone, it's better to write in second (you) or third (she/her) person.

Singing ABOUT the girl is just more romantic than singing it AS the girl. :)
 
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C'mon folks,
respect transgender as a narrative point!
That said I agree with the previous three posters.
 
thats an awesome poetry to listen up, i am surprised to read them, amazing to compose a song
 
I liked it very much. You have a way of writing that makes it visual for the reader. I'm not sure how many songs you've written but you are on your way as a song writer. You'll get many opinions in this forum, just take them as opinions, don't change a song unless you feel you need to. Just my opinion. Good luck to you.
 
I thank you guys very much for your comments on my song lyric. Your comments are always encouraging.

Thanks again.

Irwin
 
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