it's been awhile, here is a song seeking for advices

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Hello, guys

I wrote this tune after I found out that I had to drop of a class due to a possible bad grade. Sad+released sort of feeling. Here is a quick recording, and hopefully I will get some advice on mixing and arrangement. My biggest problem has always been being consistent. Did I improve?
Also, I kind lost the theme when more instruments were added. What kind of lyrics would you expect out of this tune? I am still trying to come up with some words to this song.

Thanks alot, and Happy New Year to you ALL!

"Oh Well"
www.nowhereradio.com/a1a2/singles


AL
 
for me it doesn't sounds sad..

hey AL,
I like this kinda tune alot - it has sometin jazzy; I enjoyed it a lot, and its GroovY

- there are some sync problems between the 2 guitars at 2:02; though, you have a good feeling
- the lyrics I would expect for this tune would be like: "everything goes wrong, but it doesn't matter as long as I can play my guitar!"

good work man!
 
well the song is very cool. Nice groovin in there. Can't really comment on the mix, as I don't want to say anything stupid or incorrect, but it sounds pretty good to me man, except the bass drum could come up a bit. Seeya.
 
Damn thing keeps rebuffering.....I'll try again..........oh, there it goes....nice guitar sound....kinda reminds me of Dan Hicks a little bit.........nice progression.........I like the mix fairly well...the kick could come up just a bit....it needs something more..a ride or vocals but it's a pretty cool tune.
 
Cool song!

I liked the writing and upbeat feel.
Sounds like you have too many parts in there for lyrics,unless you do a real jazzy thing.
Some really good stuff going on there,just needs to be more organized mabey.IMHOP:)

"Oh Well" seems to fit the music.
Like an Oh Well,stuff happens,but the sun is shinin,the birds are flyin,and my guitar keeps on singin this song!ha ha:D
(I know,corney!)

Has definite potential,really nice playing too!
Looking foward to more.

Have a great New Year,

Pete
 
Guys, I have just re-tracked, and added a few things/vocals. Please check it again.

groovejunkie: Yeah, this tune started as a slow jazzy one, but then kinda turned into a happy Wizzer song...Thanks for the lyrical idea, I added a couple lines of vocal, which were the background vocal lines. Haven't come up with a lead yet, have a listen

agentpenguin185: I cut some lows off the bass guitar, hopefully the kick is more audiable now.


Lt. Bob: Wish I know a sax player like you in my town. Will definitely kidnap you and play for my songs :) Thanks for the comments

AL
 
muzeman:

Can't believe you just missed it when I took the old one down and posted the new one. Please check the new one.
I have to agree with you that the song might be too busy already for vocals. This is what happens when a writer can't sing...I gotta stop filling up the space with stuff and practice singing!!

W.I.S.C.:
Man, I really took the old one down at a bad time. It should be up in a few seconds. Stay tuned :)

AL
 
oh yeah, I just couldn't stop listening it - seems to mutate to a sunny-day-song; but it grooves!
I simply love the power-part starting at 1:30 - maybe you make it a bit longer?('cos it tooks me away, but drops me too fast..)
cool man!!
 
Hey...I like the vocals. it doesn't sound too busy to me at all but then I like busy. I would have liked to hear the vocals pop back in every once in a while.

As for the sax thing.....you know I do collaborations a lot so I'm available. I'm gonna take the next month or so and put all my time into a demo for a band I'm in with my daughter. But after that I'll be into it again so PM me if you're interested.
 
I dont have any idea as to what kind of lyrics would go with this......you'll find what goes with it.I have written as many as 10 sets if lyrics to a single song.......just write and pick and choose what seems to flow with the feeling of this song to you.

This is a good tune with some really nice playing.I am definetly getting into this.
 
I tend to write songs as I go alone. The final result is never what I intended in the first place. but, I like surprises, too :) The last version of this song is uploaded, please give it one more listen.

groove:

I am glad you are digging this one. You are definitely right about the length of that power part. I listened more and had to agree with you. More parts are added now. And it seems to be a satire that the name of this song is "Oh Well" since the power part sounds pretty pissed off now. ha

Lt. Bob:

Took your advice(very good idea in fact) and threw in vocals here and there. Thanks.
I actually wrote a song awhile ago, and I knew you would be a great partner to work with for that song. I will record it and let you know via pm or email. Probably sometime in Feb, hopefully our schedules will work out. This is exciting!!

Kramer:

I know what you mean! I had written love, sad, horror stories, you name it, for this song and nothing fited really. So, I was like, oh well, and that was it. Check and see if you like the last version of it. Pretty dramatic


AL
 
A1A2 said:
Hello, guys

I wrote this tune after I found out that I had to drop of a class due to a possible bad grade. Sad+released sort of feeling. Here is a quick recording, and hopefully I will get some advice on mixing and arrangement. My biggest problem has always been being consistent. Did I improve?
Also, I kind lost the theme when more instruments were added. What kind of lyrics would you expect out of this tune? I am still trying to come up with some words to this song.

Thanks alot, and Happy New Year to you ALL!

"Oh Well"
www.nowhereradio.com/a1a2/singles


AL
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Sad+released sort of feeling. Yeah I caught that vibe in it;) . Like this Al, had a McCartney&Wings feel to for me. Yeah add some lyrics to it, I'd like to hear it again. Happy New Year!
 
Hey this is cool!.......

.....:cool: .....very cool. I like everything in this except that damn ride cymbal:D Really cool guit playing. ....Im gonna check this out again later at home.







IMPORTANT:


..........HIRE LT.BOB FOR THIS!!!! This is a perfect tune for Steve to shine in.
.....and, he will buff out your tune too.



Nice work man........ very cool stuff:cool:



G w/5 ......cause im anticipating something great when this done!!!!
 
Nice job...you might wanna' cut out some of the dead space at the beginning, b/c there's some pretty noticeable hiss on my end.

And I concur with the Guernica guy about Lt.Bob. If he's offering, I'd jump at the chance...hell, I DID.
 
Hey that's really cool A1A2!

Needs more vocals I think, a verse and pseudo chorus would be easy enough to write.

Great stuff.
 
This is a pretty cool tune.....

Im very vocal oriented, so i definitely say it needs more, but how or where, i have no advice:p

great job dude......
 
nice to listen to. sounds more like an experiment of sorts..different sounds, feels, and stuff.. rather than a song, per-say... The vocals sound more like textures rather than actual vocals to me also. I concur about all the hiss, especially noticeable in the beginning before the rest of the instruments help to mask it. medium on the distorted gtrs... sounded like "an experiment", and kinda like they didn't really fit the rest of the tune.
 
David:
McCartney&Wings, not sure if I have heard of them, but will definitely check them out sometime. happy new year!!

Guernica:
I know, I am excited to work with Lt. Kinda nervous also tho, I have heard too many great songs with him featuring in. we will see :)

chrisharris:
i really got a noisy room, gotta play with the noise gate in sound forge more often. So, how did you and Lt. do it? Send him a rough draft in mp3, have him write/record some sax, and send u back in mp3 format??

Emeric:
Thanks for the listen, man. Working on singing still, until then I am still a little shy, ha.

Gidge:
hello, there. This song was going to be vocal oriented. just a guitar and vocals. But then, I added bass, then drums and everything and turned it into a big one...it's scary how you can't stop with all these options avaliable.

Mix:
I agree with the guitars, in fact the whole loud part doesn't sound right sometimes to my ears. I think the piano messed it up most tho.
About being experiment, I think this is my problem. I tried to write a straight-forward song this time, I really tried, but I always end up adding funny things here and there, and ruin my goal....


Thanks for the inputs, all. Wish you all have a great new year!!!!

AL
 
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