Is it a crime if you rhyme every time? Here’s a dime. I’m slime.

[bemo]

Hell, Shakespear wrote and entire catalogue of sonnets, plays, epic poems that all rhymed. His work transcended the standard A-B-A-B or A-A-B-B stuff. Try a Petrarchan sonnet form likeA-B-B-A-A-B-B-A followed by C-D-E-C-D-E or C-D-C-C-D-C.

Breaking up the flow of the rhyme scheme can breathe new life into your writing by opening a new dimension for your rhymes to settle into. I also allows you to comlplete a thought with out having to be tied to one particular rhyming sound.

The genius is in the ability to not sound contrived and yet still carry out a brilliant narrative.

 

[glynb]

The genius is in the ability to not sound contrived and yet still carry out a brilliant narrative.

Well said, that just about sums it up.
I'm not sure how much folk can be taught that, or whether it's just down to talent in the end. I mean you can teach someone to paint, technicaly, but never turn them into a renowned artist, and i think the same goes for songwriting there has to be some inate talent there to develop.

 

[dragonworks]

rhyme all the time and once in awhile throw in a line that doesn't and it sticks out like a sore thumb.



electricity serve me an deliver me, save me from mediocrity,entertain eternally
pentium reality, my spirit bows to the, for you will give to me, my artificeality
subatomic realativity, you seperate from me, the true reality, here at the start of the century
the start of the century, what has been done to me
you've crushed my ancestors souls
the twenty first century, what will become of me, man and machine wire and bone
electricty, you must yield and cede, possesion of the master key, to a world unknow to me
fiber opticity, produce my sounds for me, pleasant views for the eyes to see,
deliver me from pain
titantium reality, structures of mobility, alloys of rigidity,
reoplace my limbs for me, here at the start of the century
the start of the century........
electricity, flow through my veins for me, wire up my brain to be, instantanious totality
trittium potentiality, open up the gates and free, super conducted energy, regulated to power me
cyberspace reality, dream my dreams of fantasy, here on the web for all to see, here at the start of the century
WELCOME!
the start of the century.......

 

[Garry Sharp]

Near rhymes are more fun.

I'll sink you with my love torpedo
Feast yourself on my libido

There, you see - subtle, deep and meaningful

(Sorry - just feeling playful today)