Incandescent
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jeffmaher
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There's a harshness to the piano that is unpleasant.
2.5 minutes of intro is not so great. More attention should be paid to the harmony variations...sound like you laid the first track, and just sort of let harmonie voices happen without thinking about them....very weak....illogical...not so polished.
The theme is interesting, but never develops into something that I'd want to hear twice.
The line on the guitar, and the bass movement [laying on the 5 note for the duration of the third chord , V of the minor key, is hard to enjoy] , and the piano chordings are so basic and unchanging...without texture or melodic development or tastee improv...that the song gets redundant and redundant.
I like the drums.
A Floydian slip. No cigar. But unrealized potential in the idea. [wailing Gilmourish improv soloing would be a nice addition...and maybe take the work off the ground!]
The recorded sounds are OK...hard to tell with the oceanic verb. But the piano needs a' fixin'.
I liked the drums.
2.5 minutes of intro is not so great. More attention should be paid to the harmony variations...sound like you laid the first track, and just sort of let harmonie voices happen without thinking about them....very weak....illogical...not so polished.
The theme is interesting, but never develops into something that I'd want to hear twice.
The line on the guitar, and the bass movement [laying on the 5 note for the duration of the third chord , V of the minor key, is hard to enjoy] , and the piano chordings are so basic and unchanging...without texture or melodic development or tastee improv...that the song gets redundant and redundant.
I like the drums.
A Floydian slip. No cigar. But unrealized potential in the idea. [wailing Gilmourish improv soloing would be a nice addition...and maybe take the work off the ground!]
The recorded sounds are OK...hard to tell with the oceanic verb. But the piano needs a' fixin'.
I liked the drums.
singlespeak
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Thanks man. I agree.