i wrote this song in jail last week

[hhinterwebz]

I wrote this song in jail last week. Not fun.
I violated my dui probation by drinking like an IDIOT and spent 10 days in jail.
nothing funny about that, but i did manage to find a pencil and paper and wrote this:


its supposed to be sparse and kinda sloppy that was the aesthetic. good way to vent.

 

[ido1957]

Since you brought it up, I will respond with no sympathy for either the DUI or the stint in jail. Sorry, not sorry.

 

[hhinterwebz]

Since you brought it up, I will respond with no sympathy for either the DUI or the stint in jail. Sorry, not sorry.

i wasnt even driving when it happened, i was asleep in my car with the keys in the ignition because i was listening to music and passed out. also, what about the song?

 

[Nola]

I like the beat and vibe, but the vocal has obvious autotune on it that's way too heavy for my liking.
There's no real build up in the song, either. No chorus or interesting changes of any type.

Stop drinking, too, you're going to kill someone innocent one day.

 

[TripleM]

also, what about the song?

I can't remember you ever commenting on anyone else's songs. Not sure why you expect help from other people.

 

[VomitHatSteve]

+1 to pretty much everything Nola said.

The structure's pretty repetitive. You've got to watch that AABBCC... rhyme scheme.