I would like feedback

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already I am excited about being a part of your forum. Thank you for making me feel welcome! :thumbs up:
 
That's a little harsh, Bubba. Be nice to newbies!

That being said... I hate the 12-bar blues. I find it to be the most tedious and derivative music. But I'm invested in the thread now, so I can't NOT comment on your mix. (Just a forewarning, you probably won't like my feedback since I don't like the genre you play.)

Guitar and bass tone are fine, and they blend pretty well with each other.
Your snare is too "up front". You might want to put some more reverb on it and bring it down in volume so that it sounds farther away from the listener. Are those canned drums? They're not great. They don't really "groove" so much as "hold the beat down in the most mundane way they can."
Vocals are kind of dark and quite, but I suspect that's what you're going for, so it's probably fine.
 
Thank you! The bass player actually said the same thing about the snare, I should have listened. I will try to pull it back.
 
Thanks for posting man! The drums don't really have a pocket, and I can't tell if it's because the instruments were not recording on the beat, or if the drums weren't. The snare is often too loud, and too bright for my taste. I would pull it back and try to warm it up a bit.

Vocals are too far in front of the mix for me. I'd pull them back a bit, maybe 1-2db. Whatever effects/processing you've got on the vox is pretty cool, and works for the song. Just needs to sit a little better.

The bass and guitar mesh well, but I don't love the fact that everything is straight up the center. I would play with panning the guitar off to one side. But I wonder if that will affect how the bass and guitar blend together. If panning doesn't work, maybe a bigger stereo reverb on the guitar so it takes up more of the spread.
 
It is an interesting sound that you have, but I found the track uncomfortable to listen to. At the start in particular, but generally throughout the song, there is timing tension. The instruments seem to be pushing ahead of the beat. There is not much animation in the performance, either the singing or the instrumentation. It kind of starts, goes on for a while, then stops. Some dynamic variation would be good.

The mix is strange, with very dry snare, but reverby vocals. I don't get a sense of placement on a sound stage. Experiment more with separating the instruments.
 
I thought the guitars sounded pretty good.

The first thing that struck me was the low end was much too loud. The kick and the bass are way too dominant. You could back off the snare too.

Little "fwip" sound at about :42. Another at 1:20.

The vocal has a weird reverb on it. It doesn't sound like it's in the same space as everything else. I'm also hearing some pitchiness.
 
AWESOME! Thank you guys so much! You have given me so much to work with and learn from. I have taken courses and I try to study and listen but it seems that unless tips and help is directed right at me I don't always get it. I am going to break the mix out and try to apply what you guys have told me and rebuild it. I'll separate the instruments more, back off on the snare, kick, and bass (I think being in the hard rock style most of my life has made me want a loud kick) and I'll check out the timing and reverbs and maybe add a little something to make it more exciting. I will see what I can do about helping some of the other people in this forum with my very limited knowledge and then I'll repost and see if you guys think I improved.

Until then, seriously you guys are GREAT! Thank you for the time you spent listening to my music when I am just the new guy around. You have helped me

Have a great holiday season
Ed
 
malaker said:
This is my song called Signpost, I would like your feedback about the recording and the mix. I use Cakewalk Music Creator 6 and Audacity, maybe a little Reaper, an Alesis multimix 4 https://soundcloud.com/dedandburyd/signpost

Thank You!
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Cool sounding song - I like it. It's aching for a great big solo at 1.56 though. What Steve says about 12-bar blues is kinda true, unless you make it interesting somehow. Usually that means some kind of singing or playing your ass off somehow, neither of which you're doing on this one.

The mix: can you find a way to bring the drumkit and the vocal closer together space-wise? The dry and the wet aren't quite hanging together.
 
Like where you are going with the tune. Cool little riff...makes me want to grab some adult pop and those special little cigs...but alas, I agree that the song is pretty monotonous and it doesn't really go anywhere. As far as the mix, I second what most people are saying. Give the band some space and separation. I can also hear what someone else mentioned...sounds like the guitar is trying to rush the beat a little.
 
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