HR Challenge : One Goodbye

[boydrj]

Hey Gidge -- Real nice guitar work on this and great tracking. I wasn't as sure about the vocals -- maybe would've liked to hear some harmony in there to fill them out, but if this was tracked in an hours time, then that in and of itself is an accomplishment.

Good writing. Very much reminded me of a Nashville tune.

 

[erichenryus]

gidge, i gotta agree with flat-9. i was having trouble figuring out the melody you were aiming at cause of the pitch issues. other than that it sounded fine.

 

[chrisharris]

(*bump*)


I'll reserve my comments for a more appropriate time...I know you won't be able to sleep, and your stomach will remain all "aflutter," but that's part of the magic.

 

[fenderlikingood]

Nothing to add....go figure I can't miss a gidge song!!!!
hell no, uh uh! wish i could write song's like this!!!! Man, i just go blank.............................

































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Thank's, gidge!!!!!!!

Peace

Rcik<<<<<<<<<<EDIT......and i'm dyslexic too!

 

[W.I.S.C.]

Sounds like you were a little frightened by your own voice.You need to sing from your sack.Stand,legs apart,like your straddling a pig or sheep or some other barnyard animal,crouching slightly to let the ballbag have room to move around.Now imagine the sound coming from inside your hairy yams and force it out like so much spent spunk.Visualize the notes coming directly from your banana juice factories.Release it....it wants to be free...set it free...

 

[Gidge]

flat9 - i would never pitch a song with my own vocal.....no offense taken......

boydrj - the main vocal sucked enuff...harmony would make it suck X 2.....

erich - "having trouble figuring out the melody"....damn i knew it was bad, but i didnt think it was that bad

chris - my panties are wet in anticipation for your comments

rick - thanks for listening dude

wisc - frightened it putting it mild....ive been wanting to work on my vocals but i just never seem to find the motivation because i know at best, my voice will be mediocre......but next time i do a vocal, i will keep in mind your post....very graphic visualization......hopefully my banana juice factory will be in full effect.....now, what if my yams are shaved?

 

[dafduc]

Sounds like you were a little frightened by your own voice.You need to sing from your sack.Stand,legs apart,like your straddling a pig or sheep or some other barnyard animal,crouching slightly to let the ballbag have room to move around.Now imagine the sound coming from inside your hairy yams and force it out like so much spent spunk.Visualize the notes coming directly from your banana juice factories.Release it....it wants to be free...set it free...

Damn. I can't stop laughing.

I'm picturing showing this to my vocal teacher and asking her what she thinks.

Daf

 

[dafduc]

Very good writing on the chorus. And, for my taste, you can't talk about beer anough.

The guitar sound is very good. There are spots in the solo where it's a little bland though. Liked the bass and drum sounds. Guitar level might be a bit too high it's the brightest thing in the mix, draws away from the vox.

I like your voice. Reminds me of Elvis Costello. Sounds like your fighting to stay in tune, though, and some of those leaps definitely need retakes. BTW, I was listening to the non-closet version...

You have the start of something real good here, Gidge. I'd like to hear the finished product.

Daf

 

[Kramer]

Cant get to it Gidge.Some idiot with an assload of bandwidth is playing tunes nonstop on nowhereradio in an attempt to game the charts.

Ban his IP Waldo!!!!

 

[Gidge]

dafduc, i fell the same way about the beer myself, but in trying to do a more commercial song, i am re-writing the verses ........

i think the blandness was from pretty much making the part very similar to the vocal melody of the last few lines of the chorus, which gives me a few more opportunities to "hook" said melody into the listener.....i guess i could have spiced it up a bit but that would have required some effort and im lazy......

Elvis Costello, huh.....i heard that a few times.....fighting to stay in tune is an understatement......

hopefully ill finish writing it soon.......

i say that post by Waldo but i thought the charts were based on plays from unique isp addresses, so wouldnt continually downloading from the same ISP do absolutely no good?.....anyone?.....anyone?......Bueler?......Bueler?......

 

[B.SABBATH]

nice song writing.. agree with comments re:vocal performance and sound, but it is a good song.. thought I heard a tuning issue with one of the guits.. good lyrics too..

 

[erichenryus]

erich - "having trouble figuring out the melody"....damn i knew it was bad, but i didnt think it was that bad

hey gidge, we're still friends right? i just realized i kinda sounded like a dick with that comment. didn't mean to be mean, i guess i could have just said that the vocal sounded bad and it should be retracked.

 

[TheRealWaldo]

You're right gidge... However, some people don't realize that, and figure it's like mp3.com, which counts every play regardless.

AND, the guy that's causing me all these headaches is using IP spoofing, thus, introducing a new IP every couple minutes, etc.

Tough to nail, but there is ways. Just takes time.

W.

 

[Pedullist]

Sounds like you were a little frightened by your own voice.You need to sing from your sack.Stand,legs apart,like your straddling a pig or sheep or some other barnyard animal,crouching slightly to let the ballbag have room to move around.Now imagine the sound coming from inside your hairy yams and force it out like so much spent spunk.Visualize the notes coming directly from your banana juice factories.Release it....it wants to be free...set it free...

LOL!

The frightening thing is: he's actually right!

Decent song, playing and recording. The only thing that bothers me are the vocals...but if you really believe you can't get it any better, you never will I'm afraid. First try believing in yourself, then practice your ass off...

Practicing tip: play the lead vocal part on your guitar (tune your guitar first btw, this is good for your guitartechnique too, vocal melodies aren't that logical on a fretboard...usually), record it, then sing along with it (and the rest of the tracks). Don't sing lyrics, sing 'lalalala', just focus on pitch. You'll notice pitch issues right away...do this a couple of times. Repeat the procedure for a couple of days. Then try it with lyrics. After that, try it without the lead guitar...

Singing simple melodies btw, without fancy techniques I mean, is always good anyway. Always try to sing the way you talk and make sure your voice sounds relaxed and easy. No need to try sounding like Crawdad here...if you do this a couple of times a week, you'll notice improvement in a couple of months. Yes, months. How long did it take before you played a decent chord progression on your guitar? Why does everyone think singing comes natural? It takes practice and time, just like anything else.

I'm babbling. Excuse me. I hope it's useful.

 

[Gidge]

sami, thanks for listening.....

erich, I still love ya I expect people to be honest and lets face it, the vocal was pretty bad, so dont feel bad.....

waldo, i need to try that spoofing thing....id like a chart topping song

pedullist, I believe i can get better, i just know my best wont be all that impressive....but thanks for the tips, I really appreciate it....





MIKE