Honest opinions wanted

[Enchilada]

Forget my suggestions for your song and try working on your sense of humor. Those were both jokes, get it?
And if you can't joke about youth suicide in Australia, than what can you joke about? See, that was another one.
Nevermind.

Franky you have to be one sick individual to find youth suicide funny. But lets review.....

I mean ANOTHER song about youth suicide in Australia??

Forgive me for missing the punch line. So there's no songs on the radio about youth suicide, yet there's a pun there somewhere???? I wouldn't talk about a sense of humor if I made jokes that bad buddy.

 

[TheMusic]

The first quatrain sounds kind of un...un...yknow, it doesn't sound catchy.

 

[InTheFire]

Franky you have to be one sick individual to find youth suicide funny. But lets review.....

Forgive me for missing the punch line. So there's no songs on the radio about youth suicide, yet there's a pun there somewhere???? I wouldn't talk about a sense of humor if I made jokes that bad buddy.

I thought it was funny... It's not your personal experience he's talking about nor the subject of youth suicide. We're in a forum talking about a bad lyric and your inability to express yourself in a fashion that people can understand and relate to. If you can't laugh at this tiny thing, I definitely don't think you'll reach any youth about this subject.

 

[jalbert]

Thanks InTheFire. And for christ's sake, Enchilada, lighten up. And don't call me buddy, mate.

 

[Enchilada]

poofter