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maximusbs
Brad Smith Music
I may not be the best one to comment on this genre, because I don't know what genre it is. I guess 'world' or something like that. If I had a reference, I could be more helpful.
I do like some of the tones and instrumentation. The arrangement catches me by surprise and challenges my conventions. The blending of instruments sounds good on some parts, then get a little mushy on other parts. The acoustic guitar performance sounds good. I like what the drum (machine) is playing, but of course, it sounds like a drum machine. Sometimes you can get some good drum samples and replace the one that your midi is triggering - I would try that.
The vocals seem to fit the vibe of the song, I think. But the performance sounds weak at time (intentional? Idk?)
Hopefully someone who knows this style can be more helpful -
I do like some of the tones and instrumentation. The arrangement catches me by surprise and challenges my conventions. The blending of instruments sounds good on some parts, then get a little mushy on other parts. The acoustic guitar performance sounds good. I like what the drum (machine) is playing, but of course, it sounds like a drum machine. Sometimes you can get some good drum samples and replace the one that your midi is triggering - I would try that.
The vocals seem to fit the vibe of the song, I think. But the performance sounds weak at time (intentional? Idk?)
Hopefully someone who knows this style can be more helpful -
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rnelson
Member
Like the song, mix I thought was ok. Only comment I have is that you could make some things a little more subtle, like in the intro you could lower some bits and make others more prominent instead of it all meshing together. Than again if thats what youre going for dont change a thing. and I really love some of the cool arrangements that pop out every now and then. Reminds me a bit of Jack Conte.
The only problem I heard was the vocal, it sounded really out of tune in some places, and just kinda flat overall, needs more vibrato. But you sound like youd have a really cool and interesting voice if you keep at it and practice a bit more.
Overall though, I still give think its awesome because it's one of the few pieces Ive heard around here that kinda crosses a lot of lines and really just sounds interesting, instead of just straight up rock (not that straight up rock isnt awesome too! its just nice to hear something different).
Keep it up man!
The only problem I heard was the vocal, it sounded really out of tune in some places, and just kinda flat overall, needs more vibrato. But you sound like youd have a really cool and interesting voice if you keep at it and practice a bit more.
Overall though, I still give think its awesome because it's one of the few pieces Ive heard around here that kinda crosses a lot of lines and really just sounds interesting, instead of just straight up rock (not that straight up rock isnt awesome too! its just nice to hear something different).
Keep it up man!
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TripleM
Well-known member
I like the singer's voice. There are lots of "pitch problems" in the section beginning at :45. I put that in quotes because I wasn't sure if it was intentional. But several notes were flat. Some were sharp.
Other than that, good performances.
I wasn't sure what the crackling noises were for in the intro. To me they didn't enhance the mix.
Guitars sounded pretty good, but maybe just a bit on the thin side.
Interesting piece of music.
Other than that, good performances.
I wasn't sure what the crackling noises were for in the intro. To me they didn't enhance the mix.
Guitars sounded pretty good, but maybe just a bit on the thin side.
Interesting piece of music.
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ziv
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maximusbs
about the genre issue ill take it as a compliment =)
i dont have a specific genre and im glad I dont, this actually what i was aiming at.
I really dont know why I add all those samples but thats the main thing about my music, I dont think about "what im doing" im just doing it and I let my ear decide if it sounds good, im still trying to work on my voice, youre right about the vibrato part, but I only get natural vibrato when I hit high notes, im still developing my voice, you have very good ears, I love this forum.
most of the weird stuff was intentional, I dont know why =/
rnelson
youre right about making the intro more subtle, when I listen to it again some notes get a bit hmmm.."annoying" when they hit other notes.
thank you for complimenting my guitar skills =) after all im a just a guitarist, that sings =/
overall I aim to sound "interesting" more then I aim to sound "good"
=)
about the genre issue ill take it as a compliment =)
i dont have a specific genre and im glad I dont, this actually what i was aiming at.
I really dont know why I add all those samples but thats the main thing about my music, I dont think about "what im doing" im just doing it and I let my ear decide if it sounds good, im still trying to work on my voice, youre right about the vibrato part, but I only get natural vibrato when I hit high notes, im still developing my voice, you have very good ears, I love this forum.
most of the weird stuff was intentional, I dont know why =/
rnelson
youre right about making the intro more subtle, when I listen to it again some notes get a bit hmmm.."annoying" when they hit other notes.
thank you for complimenting my guitar skills =) after all im a just a guitarist, that sings =/
overall I aim to sound "interesting" more then I aim to sound "good"
=)
jeffmaher
New member
I like it. The mic'd f-hole electric?? sounds like a Greek bazouki...and the progression and feel is in that Greek folk music ballpark. I like that stuff.
The vocal and expression is overly forced 'snotty'. A good modern idiom done to comic excess. Be yourself.
Good ears. Well, you're gonna really have to pay more attention to some of the closely-harmonized vocal lines over the complexer spots in the progression ....any deviation from absolute correct pitch is hard to like.
At 2:35 there's an example of a repeating, unpleasant dissonance between two instruments....some length or what sounds like an error...a conflict.
Ah! I went to give you some rep...and discovered you're in Israel. That explains the Greek stain on your composition. One of the gifts left by Greco-Roman influence is in the trad music.
But I do like where this is going. Eclectic stuff. And it's got a natural free-flow...and the parts are really inventive. Look forward to more!
The vocal and expression is overly forced 'snotty'. A good modern idiom done to comic excess. Be yourself.
Good ears. Well, you're gonna really have to pay more attention to some of the closely-harmonized vocal lines over the complexer spots in the progression ....any deviation from absolute correct pitch is hard to like.
At 2:35 there's an example of a repeating, unpleasant dissonance between two instruments....some length or what sounds like an error...a conflict.
Ah! I went to give you some rep...and discovered you're in Israel. That explains the Greek stain on your composition. One of the gifts left by Greco-Roman influence is in the trad music.
But I do like where this is going. Eclectic stuff. And it's got a natural free-flow...and the parts are really inventive. Look forward to more!
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XLR
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Ziv, inspiring creativity. Nice touches with the backwards sounds. They were effective and didn't stand out as gimmicks. The bird chirping at the end was really good. I'd keep the chirps subtle through to the very end if was me. I like the balance of the mix, the texture of the layered parts and the flow and variety of the piece as it moves along. The guitar at 2:45 is really beautiful. Sounds like Barrios’ La Catedral for a moment. Lots of other good things about the piece but I hate long posts so I’ll rag on you now. 
The added guitar on the far left at 3:00 isn’t tight with the other guitar’s rhythm, and too loud IMO also. Some other moments too in the piece where relative balances could let great parts shine more. When you get a magic moment like that, don't clutter it up, dude! The two guitars, left and right, were sometimes not well in tune with each other. When you multitrack using different guitars, well worth it to take whatever amount of time you need to get them really well in tune. Is that a maraca being jiggled around :05? I like the sonority of it, but it needs to fit in more rhythmically. Done here. Great piece.
The added guitar on the far left at 3:00 isn’t tight with the other guitar’s rhythm, and too loud IMO also. Some other moments too in the piece where relative balances could let great parts shine more. When you get a magic moment like that, don't clutter it up, dude! The two guitars, left and right, were sometimes not well in tune with each other. When you multitrack using different guitars, well worth it to take whatever amount of time you need to get them really well in tune. Is that a maraca being jiggled around :05? I like the sonority of it, but it needs to fit in more rhythmically. Done here. Great piece.
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ziv
New member
thank u jeffmaher !
yeah, I may find the answer to my influence in my ethnicity
although when I grew up I didnt listen to balkan music or anything like that
in second thought, you cant close your minds to what you hear everywhere
but the israeli music situation is lousy, too trendy and everything is about money here, so we lack real talent (no recognition for real musicians)
but the advantage is we get mixed cultures but still were very young
and small, and at war, so...you know
our main stream of music is quite poor
so you grow up listening to great stuff from all over the world
but when you compose your own uniqe genre
you have nothing to do with this kind
of music in israel you see...
that depresses me very deeply
basically I just do what my head is telling me.
ahh I talk too much
thank you all , do you think that USA will accept me as a musician? lol
yeah, I may find the answer to my influence in my ethnicity
although when I grew up I didnt listen to balkan music or anything like that
in second thought, you cant close your minds to what you hear everywhere
but the israeli music situation is lousy, too trendy and everything is about money here, so we lack real talent (no recognition for real musicians)
but the advantage is we get mixed cultures but still were very young
and small, and at war, so...you know
our main stream of music is quite poor
so you grow up listening to great stuff from all over the world
but when you compose your own uniqe genre
you have nothing to do with this kind
of music in israel you see...
that depresses me very deeply
basically I just do what my head is telling me.
ahh I talk too much
thank you all , do you think that USA will accept me as a musician? lol
jeffmaher
New member
Answer: an easy 'yes'.
The influences you have, such as they may be, are rare in pop music. If you develop your material along the lines I hear, you'll have something kind of unique...and that's a great thing.
One thing I like is the free flow of measures that compliment melody first. I have a friend who writes what he hears, and his measure constructions are whacked out....I have to chart the tunes to play them....but they flow so naturally with melody and phrasing, it works really well. You have some of that going on.
The other thing is the use of unusual sound...the 'bazouki', for example....and the way you hear the progressions changing modes for a spell. Definitely outside of the usual box. The rythm you used was rare, and well executed.
So, keep going. You're onto something really good.
The influences you have, such as they may be, are rare in pop music. If you develop your material along the lines I hear, you'll have something kind of unique...and that's a great thing.
One thing I like is the free flow of measures that compliment melody first. I have a friend who writes what he hears, and his measure constructions are whacked out....I have to chart the tunes to play them....but they flow so naturally with melody and phrasing, it works really well. You have some of that going on.
The other thing is the use of unusual sound...the 'bazouki', for example....and the way you hear the progressions changing modes for a spell. Definitely outside of the usual box. The rythm you used was rare, and well executed.
So, keep going. You're onto something really good.
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ziv
New member
XLR , calling this "inspiring" is just the fuel i need to keep it going ^_^
and if you say and easy "yes" , here I come USA =P
and if you say and easy "yes" , here I come USA =P
