flash flood - please critique?

[uhh its charlie]

about a year or so ago, a good friend of mine (who is a genious at recording &things of the like) moved his stuff in my house and we recorded a bunch of things. i played all the instruments, and he mixed everything. he used nuendo to do it all &it's really good stuff.

i just figured i'd share the song, i kind of want critiques more on the writing and preformance. &the reason it flows off into a note in the end is because it went right into another song, by the way. hahah

 

[Jack Real]

Hi

Very good song with good recording and mix. I like the guitars, drums and vocals. It jumps at 1:37, hope you can fix that.

Nice work.

Jack Real.

 

[uhh its charlie]

indeed it does jump, i think it was from uploading.
i'm not very concerned about it though, it's stuff i don't really get around to letting people hear haha