First time in this forum....

[JordanD]

Asshole. You piss me off because you've already proven to EVERYBODY you have no talent, and you've been told over and over again that you are worthless in every sense of the word.

I never said I'm standing firm on my lyrics, I said the exact opposite. But I don't expect a mentally handicapped, talentless troll like you to comprehend the obvious. What I DID say is that YOUR opinion is worthless. Now fuck off and do us all a favor......try to over-dose next time, OK????

i can take the worst criticism possible with a huge smile because im just happy i can hear, man you are angry. im actually laughing manically now. you are just too much! i really cant believe you posted those lyrics though, hehe, im just telling you the truth, they are not a hit, and they sound like what i wrote when i was 15!

I wrote this for people like you!

someones taken the gold from your soul
and pulled your dreams out by the root
now everytime you sleep, you sleep real good
but when you close your eyes it dont feel like it should

someones smoked the cigars from your box
and blew the smoke into your mansion
now you cant relax, its such a drag
because nothing you do feels the same anymore

did you lose your touch
did you take too much
not even a walk through the dark
could respark your shorted heart

and now you'll never leave

someones turned your mind into a slave
and replaced your visions with television
now you cant get a break, its fake
when your memories are reruns of a strangers day

did you lose your touch
did you take too much
not even a walk through the dark
could respark your shorted heart

and now you'll never leave

or this

never say sorry for what you've done
its not your fault for what you've become
they tricked your mind and had their fun
now its up to you will you come

dont wear the pain that they shove
to give to you, cos they dont love
you can do anything all of the above
they missed their chance and dont notice the sun

if they laugh at your dreams
ask them what is theirs
and if they dont have a good answer
then you know thats its not fair

if they tell you live a life
and you ask them what is theirs
they'll tell you something
about what you just dont care

youre gonna shine to prove them wrong
you'll show em all with your pretty songs
or pretty pictures, if its pretty its not wrong
and if makes you happy, do it all along

dont let bitter words burn
they had their chance, now its your turn
dont make their mistakes
you can hear it in their voice, they'll never learn

 

[RAMI]

ZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZZzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz.....not worth a response.

 

[Chili]

Man, I go to work for a couple of hours and I miss all this?????

 

[XLR]

I can't remember giving neg rep before. But I just did to JordanD.

I can't remember reporting a post before, but I just did. JordanD is a troll.

 

[Chili]

oh stop! do you really think the song he posted was good or interesting? i couldnt believe what i was reading, it was so stale and thoughtless! it was like a clinical exam. do you really think it stands up to this deeply personal tale of mine!

You're a dumb-fuck. This thread is to discuss Rami's material. Don't come in here posting your garbage. Start a thread of your own and post your work there. Maybe people will be considerate enough to give their thoughts on it there. Not here, asshole.

 

[XLR]

Just in case the troll edits his posts, I wanted to save them here. Any Mod's around? I'm not holding my breath.

hi rami, i have to say, i am so disappointed in these lyrics. they read very cliche and they dont make me feel any emotions at all. i really expected more from you. i can tell you are in a creative slump.

compare that to my new song:

have you ever kissed a diamond
laughed the jester to an eagle
we can all build a ship
and we'll fly away

have you ever sparkled star dust
cried the cat to a baby
we can all build a ship
cos' i know the way

were gonna go higher than an airplane
have you ever gone as high as a rocketship... [snip]

oh stop! do you really think the song he posted was good or interesting? i couldnt believe what i was reading, it was so stale and thoughtless! it was like a clinical exam. do you really think it stands up to this deeply personal tale of mine!

there was a time
there was snow outside
you asked me to let you in
from my bedroom window

that was the time
you told me to close my eyes
as you undressed
and crawled into the sheets

tonight
your as cold as an outerspace satellite
frozen with ice

by the time of midnight
you were cold as dynamite
buried in the snow
my candle light shined white [snip]

man you are angry. im actually laughing manically now. you are just too much! i really cant believe you posted those lyrics though, hehe, im just telling you the truth, they are not a hit, and they sound like what i wrote when i was 15!

I wrote this for people like you!

someones taken the gold from your soul
and pulled your dreams out by the root
now everytime you sleep, you sleep real good
but when you close your eyes it dont feel like it should

someones smoked the cigars from your box
and blew the smoke into your mansion
now you cant relax, its such a drag
because nothing you do feels the same anymore

did you lose your touch
did you take too much
not even a walk through the dark
could respark your shorted heart [snip]

 

[RAMI]

I realize I didn't handle this very well. But Jordan has been trolling other people's threads for much too long. If he continues to do this to other people, I'll do all I can to get him banned, or I'll leave and take as many people with me as I can. There is somewhere else we can all go.

 

[JordanD]

I realize I didn't handle this very well. But Jordan has been trolling other people's threads for much too long. If he continues to do this to other people, I'll do all I can to get him banned, or I'll leave and take as many people with me as I can. There is somewhere else we can all go.

rami, if anyones behavior was 'bannable'(aiy dios mio) it was yours. whats wrong with posting my own lyrics for comparison!

 

[XLR]

Don't feed the jordan troll.

 

[JordanD]

you guys are insane!

 

[RAMI]

you guys are insane!

HAHAHA! A glue-sniffer with mental problems and absolutely NO talent at ANYTHING telling US we're insane. Now I've heard it all. That's like Hitler telling someone not to be so mean.

Jordan, not that I really care, but it's obvious you need help. And I don't mean seeing a shrink once a week. I mean....you need a team. You need to go to...like....Vienna, where they can put you under 24 hour surveillance.

To the rest of you, thanx a million for the help. I posted this as a first draft knowing it needed work, and I got some great input and ideas from the rest of you.

This thread is now closed.