First Effort

[jonny deep]

Hey all!

Here is my first attempt at recording and mixing (and writing and arranging). I've messed about with electronic stuff in the past, but this is my first real attempt at a song.

I know it needs a lot of work and stuff adding (and the vocals re-recording - were done in one take and cleaned up with variaudio as best I can!), but am after comments on the mix. I've listened to loads of the songs in here - the quality is amazing - I hope I can get close someday!

Thanks!

 

[joejohnston]

wow not bad for a first try. luv the clever sort-of instrument that kicks off the song..what is that? song sounds kind of retro..is that what you're going for?

 

[jonny deep]

Hey. Thanks for your response! The intro is guitar with muted strings, double tracked, panned and put through GuitarRig. I don't really have an agenda for the style of music I'm making, but I love playing old rock n roll songs when I gig. I also love pop, rock, metal and indie, and I think you can hear a bit of some of these in the track. This song is kind of what I imagine rockabilly is (but I don't actually know what rockabilly is).

Was hoping for a few more listens/comments - perhaps if I add a Soundcloud link when I get home - I don't really like the loss of quality when it transcodes, though. I figure the mix is messy enough already!

 

[TripleM]

I really liked the song. Real fun listen. I liked the vocal effects - they worked well in this mix.

I don't usually like all the reverb on the guitars, but again it worked well here. I liked the guitar tone. A little harsh, but not real bad.

I'd probably compress the vocal a little harder. Words here and there get lost.

The lead guitar is kind of frequency fighting with with the rhythm. I think if you notch out a cut in they rhythm guitar at maybe 2700hz or so - real narrow and maybe 4-5 dbs - you'd take care of the harshness and frequency fighting at the same time.

Having trouble hearing the cymbals or kick. The drums are all snare. What I can hear from the cymbals - they lack cohesion. They don't work as a unit.

You might be able to bring up the bass a db or two.

Cool ending too.

 

[jonny deep]

Coolio, thanks for the great comments - I'll definitely try out your suggestions when I get some time. Glad you enjoyed the song - I've listened to it so many times now I really started to hate it! I know what you mean about the harshness of the guitar - I used GuitarRig on a preset - haven't got to the bottom of that plugin yet - need to spend some time sculpting a better sound out of it.

The drums are all Addictive Drums - I compressed each drum then the kit as a whole. Again, I need to spend more time humanising it (all the hits are 100 velocity and perfectly quantised at the moment) - I was concentrating primarily on the mix. Interesting you can't hear the cymbals, they're quite clear on my monitors (except for a few of the 2nd crashes). Guess my room needs some attention!

I just received my copy of Mike Senior's book, so some hard studying will probably help no end.

I've put it up on SoundCloud as well now, so people don't have to download a 7MB mp3, but I think it sounds awful played from that site: -

http://soundcloud.com/sham_recordings/one-two-three


Thanks again!!!

 

[Stratomaster]

Sounds good, very listenable. There is a lack of dynamics, I see you mentioned the drums are all full blast-I go in and randomize my velocities within a certain range per drum, using addictive drums myself. I like the added guitar riffs in the 3rd verse-that's the kind of dynamics i'm talking about that are lacking in the first 2 verses. Good guitar playing, nice tones. I thought the end guitar solo was a little loud.

You also mention you expected more listens/comments.....lol....You know every time I post up a song I make sure I PARTICIPATE on the board, I find the songs people are ignoring and give them a listen cause noone likes to be ignored. If everyone just dropped off their stuff for review we'd have an endless procession of 0 response posts. Your song here has more responses than my last 3 song posts put together, go figure....

Strat