up-fiddler
Taming the World--for now
And I always thought Stumpy was one of the seven dwarves. I hope you two remember the rest of us when you are rich and famous.
And I always thought Stumpy was one of the seven dwarves. I hope you two remember the rest of us when you are rich and famous.
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Oancient1
New member
In my case, I rarely finish anything. I sometimes complete a whole tune worth of chord progressions and even record it, but rarely can come up with a complete set of decent lyrics. Heres the latest frustration, trying to write a 4/4 rocker about how chasing after some bitch's affection is like walking a highwire. I like the chorus, which came together in 10 minutes of uncharacteristic inspiration, but have been a month coming up with the first shitty verse.
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HIGHWIRE CONNECTION
V1
Same old bad dream every night
I'm high above the screaming crowd
No room to move to the left or the right
And a long way down to the ground
Never been close enough to reach out and touch
No matter how hard I tried
Babe you got me stuck on a highwire
And you're standin' on the other side...
Standing on the other side...
C
Highwire connection
That's all I have to you
I got no sense of direction
To help me make it through
Babe you got me walkin' a highwire
And if I should fall down
I'll still be wantin'..,your sweet lovin'
When I hit the ground
V2
<blank stare>
GUITAR SOLO INTERLUDE
(over chorus progression)
V3
<more lack of inspiration>
C3
<thoughtful variations on C1>
FADE OUTRO
Highwire connection ... to you
(more minor pentatonic rock blues guitar slop)
Highwire connection ...
(more slop)
etc.
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Anyone out the want to help me complete this piece?
Tom
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HIGHWIRE CONNECTION
V1
Same old bad dream every night
I'm high above the screaming crowd
No room to move to the left or the right
And a long way down to the ground
Never been close enough to reach out and touch
No matter how hard I tried
Babe you got me stuck on a highwire
And you're standin' on the other side...
Standing on the other side...
C
Highwire connection
That's all I have to you
I got no sense of direction
To help me make it through
Babe you got me walkin' a highwire
And if I should fall down
I'll still be wantin'..,your sweet lovin'
When I hit the ground
V2
<blank stare>
GUITAR SOLO INTERLUDE
(over chorus progression)
V3
<more lack of inspiration>
C3
<thoughtful variations on C1>
FADE OUTRO
Highwire connection ... to you
(more minor pentatonic rock blues guitar slop)
Highwire connection ...
(more slop)
etc.
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Anyone out the want to help me complete this piece?
Tom
suprstar
It aint ez being green
My finished song percentage is in the neighborhood of 0%.
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mikeh
New member
up-fiddler,
I can't speak for Whatmysay - but once Simon Cowell and I are hangin' and sipping Crown Royal from the high heels of super models........I probably won't have time to hang around here anymore.
I can't speak for Whatmysay - but once Simon Cowell and I are hangin' and sipping Crown Royal from the high heels of super models........I probably won't have time to hang around here anymore.
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Guitarer
New member
Whatmysay
New member
I think you could justifiable rhyme love and above in this one somewhere and it not sound contrived?
I wrote and recorded a song the 'Acrobats Wife' last year - it similar in illusion but is a much more explicit narrative based on Wim Wender's Wings of Desire. Anyway please listen and plunder from it what you can - thanks for offering up the 'stem'.
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Oancient1
New member
Thanks Guitarer and Whatmysay. I'll have your ideas in hand when I sit with the piece later today.
Tom
Tom
_brian_
Member
i've never finished a song, never happy with anything
Time to die
Time to die
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Oancient1
New member
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SEDstar
Active member
whoa...
prety cool... somethng in the guitars sounds ZZtop, something else sounds slightly 38 special.... but overall slightly more country than rock.
really cool.
do you take unsolicited lyrics submissions? to see if you can have another original song to play out?
I concntrate on trying to make music, rarely does the music suggest a lyric(s) and i cant really capitalize on the verbal hooks that present themselves.
Anyways, this was a lyrics idea that just "wrote itself". Noothing special on its own merits, as naked lyrics, but... made the boss's wife cry when she read the "bad poem". I have tried and failed to make any music for it...
anyways, back to YOU, lol. Much later on, I got two guys that do karaoke at the cowboy bar to "sing it with me" acapella at work. The only "rhythm" I can get to "sing" it off key (I can not sing, LMAO) sounds sorta like a country song to me, and to other people too.
about the only thing I know about country music and lyrics is that I dont know anything about the subject, lol
hearing you do this song here, and reading back the development of it, makes me toss it out there. Because our friend was killed, and the story country song is a fantasy response to it? Always wished I could get "something" to "report back" with, you know?
I ended up here from a much smaller site, when it died, and i know I only meet "minimum specs" on technical ability here, thats why I am so formal and polite. I *strongly suspect* but cant prove that some people on here probably mixed the toothpaste commercials I hear on the radio, for instance, LMAO
hearing your voice be "half country" makes me think of trying this.
prety cool... somethng in the guitars sounds ZZtop, something else sounds slightly 38 special.... but overall slightly more country than rock.
really cool.
do you take unsolicited lyrics submissions? to see if you can have another original song to play out?
I concntrate on trying to make music, rarely does the music suggest a lyric(s) and i cant really capitalize on the verbal hooks that present themselves.
Anyways, this was a lyrics idea that just "wrote itself". Noothing special on its own merits, as naked lyrics, but... made the boss's wife cry when she read the "bad poem". I have tried and failed to make any music for it...
anyways, back to YOU, lol. Much later on, I got two guys that do karaoke at the cowboy bar to "sing it with me" acapella at work. The only "rhythm" I can get to "sing" it off key (I can not sing, LMAO) sounds sorta like a country song to me, and to other people too.
about the only thing I know about country music and lyrics is that I dont know anything about the subject, lol
hearing you do this song here, and reading back the development of it, makes me toss it out there. Because our friend was killed, and the story country song is a fantasy response to it? Always wished I could get "something" to "report back" with, you know?
I ended up here from a much smaller site, when it died, and i know I only meet "minimum specs" on technical ability here, thats why I am so formal and polite. I *strongly suspect* but cant prove that some people on here probably mixed the toothpaste commercials I hear on the radio, for instance, LMAO
hearing your voice be "half country" makes me think of trying this.
iqi616
Yet another Mike
... or standard autobiography BS
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SEDstar
Active member
...
I had always heard there was a "period" where they were writing 10,20 songs a DAY, and later picking out the "gems".
Heck, Jeff Lynne is known to have holed up in an expensive suite with a few guys for a week or two and have completed most of the raw material for a whole concept album...
there are days i think "they" are no different from "us"... they just DO it more, hundreds and thousands of times over a couple decades and then when all the "gems" have been picked out, its 20 pretty cool songs overall, not just one.
maybe they just put numbers up on the board.
*shrugs*
I had always heard there was a "period" where they were writing 10,20 songs a DAY, and later picking out the "gems".
Heck, Jeff Lynne is known to have holed up in an expensive suite with a few guys for a week or two and have completed most of the raw material for a whole concept album...
there are days i think "they" are no different from "us"... they just DO it more, hundreds and thousands of times over a couple decades and then when all the "gems" have been picked out, its 20 pretty cool songs overall, not just one.
maybe they just put numbers up on the board.
*shrugs*
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Oancient1
New member
I am always open to lyrical ideas, although sad songs aren't much my style. Send 'em via PM if you like.
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Oancient1
New member
Oh yeah .... thanks for the kind words. The resemblance to ZZ is a persistant comment to the simple stuff I do. Half country indeed -- I have always thought that when the rise of disco and dance pop cut the heart out of the rock business, all the hippy guitar players traded in their headbands for cowboy hats and started to call themselves country. Of course this one can only ever be half country as nowhere did I say God bless America, or a word about trucks, or anything my mama or daddy taught me.
Thanks for listening.