FINALLY! The first of 5 is done... and HERE it IS!

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So I have asked a TON of questions on here, and most of them have been answered, and thank you!

Here's the product of my first Home Studio attempt:
It's on No Where Radio:
http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=2077&alid=-1

It's called Crazy, and I wrote it about a year ago.

I recorded it using my Behringer MX2004, and into Cool Edit Pro.
(2) ECM-8000's
(1) Behringer B-1
(1) Superlux CH-8A
(1) SM-58
(3) SM-57
(1) AKG D190E
(1) AKG D125
(1) AT MB4000C
and various direct in's from amps (well, a combo usually of direct in and mic'ed amps...)

Please gimme some feedback! What do you think? What could I have done to make it better?

Thanks Folks!
Jimmy
 
Hey Jimmy, I would love to hear the song but it looks like the link may be broken. You may want to check it out.

God Bless!
 
???

so fifty people or so have visited this link, and NO ONE has anything to say about this song?

COME ON! PLEASE gimme some feedback!
 
your song

acoustic guitar in beginning sets up good vibe. Consider making more of lower mids on down present. Looking for more of a "well rounded"sond from the acoustic. sax melody needs some work in very beginning-goes nowhere. bass tone seems like it needs more bottom or less higher end. Not quite the right tone for this kind of tune. drums have a nice ambience to them but the toms seem a little flabby when they are hit. Also the kit seems a little "blurry" I don't know if that word is helpful but listen to other CD's and I think you'll know what I mean. I'd also like the drummer to tighten up on the flams (I think that's what they are called). WAY too much reverb on the voice. Also the singers tone seems a bit too nasely sounding for this tune. Bad key for him? try lowering the key or makng him sing with a much warmer tone. Sax solo in the middle of the tune is GREAT! I really liked it. lyrically needs some serious work. shoot a full dose into my veins, shoot it in my veins, anything like that is the worst kind of cliche and should be avoided like the plague. it's the "crying in the rain" of the new millenium. What kind of crazy feelings? When trying to describe what you are describing, I find it best to "show don't tell" or describe what your after by "going to the left" of it. Haikus are the best example of this. like this one by buson "escaped the nets/escaped the ropes/moon on the water. There is another great example in "Mary jane's last dance" by tom petty "there's pidgeons down on market square/she's in her underwear/looking down from her hotel room/nightfall will be coming soon" when you get to the line about the underwear you like what's she doing in her underwear but the rest of the stanza spins your perception around in a way that is really effective.rewrite the lyrics after reading haiku for about a month and I think you'll be pleasantly surprised. Also the whole song isn't on nowhere radio. I downloaded the whole file but you should re-up it to make sure that it is all there.Hope this was helpfull.-Dave
 
try the mp3clinic...if you're discourged with the replies.

the playing sounds ok and all....but..

it sounds like a couple of room mics just set up...especially on the drums. ...and some reverb added to the vocals. Very "distant" sounding...and lacks anything upfront.

the stereo separation is about nil too.

the musical performances outweigh the recording abilities on this one, imo.
 
Feedback ya want, feedback ya get-----Jimmy, this track does not work as it is now. The song is fine but the performance is not. The drums and bass add nothing to the song. No feel, no groove. The kids on Bandstand always said "I like the beat" -remember that! The problem with the drums is both what is played and how they sound. A room sound is only good if you have a good sounding kit in a good sounding room! This distant sound is boxy and unfocused. Try close miking and get the drummer to try a different approach or try a different drummer. The bass never does its' job of anchoring the sound. Less notes--- played with authority and power would help. The sax sounds good, but better if it does not play over the vocal. Use the sax on intro,then solo, then at end. The acoustic sounds fine, and sets a groove that is lost when the other tracks come in. Remember, when in doubt--leave it out!
Less is more in lots of cases. Do not be discouraged by these comments. This was your FIRST TRACK! My first track was so god-awful that I destroyed the tape so that nobody could ever hear it! Keep working, have fun, but realize that you have a good bit of learning in front of you. Good news---this is NOT an equipment issue! Much better sound will come from what you have right now. Playing with feel is the key. When you do something that makes you grin and makes you move, then you are on the right track. Good luck.
Bill
 
Sum of parts greater than whole.

Each instrument and vocal sounds recorded well. But seems busy to me. I can't focus on any one thing. I'd like to hear the vocal up front more, and if you have busy parts during vocals, put em in the back - like the sax. That way I can hear them later if i listen to it many times, the way you do with your favorite CD's LP's etc.
 
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