
Garry Sharp
Lost Cause
Well you do better with English as a second language than many do with it as their first
(Northern Europeans seem to take well to English though; I think I have a vague idea as to why that is, one day when I retire I can take the time to find out properly).
What I meant about the strings was partly their quality (the Trinity sound is pretty dated these days) but mostly that you need to do more work on the parts themselves, it sounds like they are descending root/3rd/5th parts, by voicing I meant moving things around so that the root is not the lowest note in every chord.
I thought that musically the prechorus (you could call it a bridge) fitted well but really I think you should go on your own convictions, as with the chorus when you write it. You clearly have the ability and you don't want to end up with a camel. (A camel is a horse designed by a committee
)
Good stuff.

What I meant about the strings was partly their quality (the Trinity sound is pretty dated these days) but mostly that you need to do more work on the parts themselves, it sounds like they are descending root/3rd/5th parts, by voicing I meant moving things around so that the root is not the lowest note in every chord.
I thought that musically the prechorus (you could call it a bridge) fitted well but really I think you should go on your own convictions, as with the chorus when you write it. You clearly have the ability and you don't want to end up with a camel. (A camel is a horse designed by a committee

Good stuff.