Feedback Por Favor- 'A Step Behind'

[powderfinger]

the message

i had some serve trouble so hopefully it doesn't print this twice.....


well....first and foremost, any production feedback would be great........i used cakewalk's tape sim for the first time and am not sure if it made it too muddy or just right, after all, i have not idea how to use it yet........

also........this song sparked a small controversy in the band.....one side claims it's too pop/punk for our band (it's our only tune to clock in under 3:00)....the other side says it's too good to just drop.......any feedback here would be great........

http://www.nowhereradio.com/artists/album.php?aid=1642&alid=154

the song is 'A Step Behind'

 

[dres]

Good stuff - I liked it. Suggestions:

Overall the mix seemed a little top heavy and the bass was a little lost... perhaps compress it some and beef it up with some eq ? Kick too.

I really like the sound of the voice but it obviously wasn't hitting the high notes correctly (I'm a fussy barstard ). Either keep recording it till you nail it or change the melody slightly to avoid the highest notes. This style lends itself to a touch of "out of tune vocals" just not quite that much. Maybe a little harmonies and verb would help. Last suggestion.... needs a better ending, feels like you had a power failure !

Good song, good structure, melodic etc takes me back to my band days ... especially the gits. Great youthful, raw feel - don't lose that.

My 2 cents

 

[mkg]

You guys have a fresh sound which I dig, and good energy. To my ears, the production end of this is pretty good.
My main problem with this is the phrasing and choice of words in spots...it seems awkward.
This type of song calls for tight phrasing, and more consistent rhyming. There are spots where the singer has to hurry the phrasing in order to get all the syllables in.
If you're going to keep this (and for the music, I think you should) I suggest a rewrite of the lyric. The end of each verse line is where the problems lie. I would suggest shortening the verse to fit the rhythm, and using more rhyme. Let the lyric hook the listener!
Good song in the making here, but the lyric needs help in my opinion.

Mark

 

[JuSumPilgrim]

The vocals are flat all over the place. EQwise the vocals are good but a little thin.
You might want to pull up the snare a few dB, maybe yank it out bet 1.5k-2.5k. The drums overall need more definition and the guitar probably needs more low mid, more compression. Everything could use a bit more gel all around. Not bad though...nothing was woefully out of whack.

 

[powderfinger]

Thanks for all the input guys...........all your suggestions will help my future endeavors, but as of now, we've dropped this song, so it probably won't see anymore work for a while.....i guess we'll keep it in the bag if we need more songs, but right now some of the band members pulled out the trump card and just said no..............thanks though..............we'll have another different track up sometime tonight or tomorrow that should be a little more our style that will replace this one