Hey Everyone
I've been lurking around the forum for a long time under my old name 'Danno' but for some reason I was unable to start a thread under my old name so I re-registered as 'dannoman'. I've never posted any lyrics for critiqing...but after reading some of your posts would really appreciate feddback on the folowing song. I've played guitar for 35 years and am mostly an acoustic guy these days. I enjoy the likes of CSN, Neil Young, Beatles, Jimmy Buffet, Cat Stevens, etc...I have a BR8 that I use as a scratch pad for my originals...so I'll post this tune when I get it recorded. Any recommendations on a site that will host my mp3's. Anyway, thanks in advance to everyone for your feedback....BTW, I'm pretty thick-skinned...so blast away if it stinks.
Take Me Back
Verse 1
take me
take me back in time
when I was just a child
for just a while
I promise not to cry
Verse 2
lay me
underneath those stars
that shimmered in the night
with friends nearby
as we pondered life
-chorus-
aint it kind of funny how
the time rolls on
one day we’re here
the next we’re gone
guitar solo ( 1 verse)
Verse 3
take me
take me back in time
so I can say goodbye
to those who died
well before their time
Verse 4
tell me
tell me where the years have gone
and when I die
will it be alright
if I close my eyes
-chorus-
I've been lurking around the forum for a long time under my old name 'Danno' but for some reason I was unable to start a thread under my old name so I re-registered as 'dannoman'. I've never posted any lyrics for critiqing...but after reading some of your posts would really appreciate feddback on the folowing song. I've played guitar for 35 years and am mostly an acoustic guy these days. I enjoy the likes of CSN, Neil Young, Beatles, Jimmy Buffet, Cat Stevens, etc...I have a BR8 that I use as a scratch pad for my originals...so I'll post this tune when I get it recorded. Any recommendations on a site that will host my mp3's. Anyway, thanks in advance to everyone for your feedback....BTW, I'm pretty thick-skinned...so blast away if it stinks.
Take Me Back
Verse 1
take me
take me back in time
when I was just a child
for just a while
I promise not to cry
Verse 2
lay me
underneath those stars
that shimmered in the night
with friends nearby
as we pondered life
-chorus-
aint it kind of funny how
the time rolls on
one day we’re here
the next we’re gone
guitar solo ( 1 verse)
Verse 3
take me
take me back in time
so I can say goodbye
to those who died
well before their time
Verse 4
tell me
tell me where the years have gone
and when I die
will it be alright
if I close my eyes
-chorus-