Feedback Appreciated on this short experiment

[FranklinD]

http://www.soundclick.com/updateband/songInfo.cfm?bandID=767544&updated=6179369&name#6179369

I'm not really done with it yet but I would like some feedback on my progress so far. There are a couple things I want to change with the background guitar too. Thanks a lot.

Edit: It's the "Untitled" one

 

[mwthompson]

That link takes me to my own admin page on soundclick...

 

[NL5]

http://www.soundclick.com/updateband/songInfo.cfm?bandID=767544&updated=6179369&name#6179369

I'm not really done with it yet but I would like some feedback on my progress so far. There are a couple things I want to change with the background guitar too. Thanks a lot.

Edit: It's the "Untitled" one

Link don't work for me either....

 

[FranklinD]

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/default.cfm?bandid=767544

How about now?

 

[mwthompson]

Are you going to add vocals, or is this an instrumental? It's a nice framework, but sounds like a backing track for something. It needs a solo instrument or vocal line to keep it from sounding repetitive, imho.

A really cool start though!

 

[mwthompson]

I liked "An Untimely Stint."

 

[Erockrazor]

Really cool. I can hear it being a backing track to something very easily. Maybe something with investigations and crime solving! Cool vibe to it. The delay gives it an atmosphere that I like to hear. The percussion was pretty cool, though I think it was very upfront in the mix.