I use to go by the rule that, "if I can't pull it off with just my acoustic and vocals, then I should rethink the song". My idea being not to rely on any one or anything for the power, quality or feeling of a song. Granted, this gives rise to a level of competence at guitar (my chosen writing medium). That aside, let me know what ya think of these lyrics. They all are sung over the same chord pattern and I don't feel like introducing a "chorus, bridge" change in the progression. I know it is hard due to a lack of actual music but, I think this hard front of naked lyrics is a great place to start in my current dilema.
"Dying on the vine"
I've been falling out of favor with my
demons and my saviors claim the day
is never coming when I freely drink tommorrows wine
today
No more waiting for the fulcrum
to finnaly give and them some mystic
glitch fixes the lonelyness that's plagued my sorry supine life's
array
"chorus"
no more, Dying on the vine
Waiting for what's behind
forsaking the moment for better times
no more, Dying on the vine
That mad maiden serindipity can't seem
to find a way for me to be
blessed with fortune in both time and
space
So I trade my stagnant yearnings for a
switchblade sharp and learning, carving
out my own kinetic slice of
fate.
Chorus,
Chorus,
Repeate first verse.
End.
I know it is a tad convoluted but, it flows nicely when sung with the chord progression.
Any thoughts, help, suggestions? When I play it on the acoustic, it sounds good but, has no balls. I heard a powerful "band"song in my head, with all the parts of bass, drums and lead git giving the overall song some nuts but, I don't want to depend on that to write a solid tune.
Theron.
"Dying on the vine"
I've been falling out of favor with my
demons and my saviors claim the day
is never coming when I freely drink tommorrows wine
today
No more waiting for the fulcrum
to finnaly give and them some mystic
glitch fixes the lonelyness that's plagued my sorry supine life's
array
"chorus"
no more, Dying on the vine
Waiting for what's behind
forsaking the moment for better times
no more, Dying on the vine
That mad maiden serindipity can't seem
to find a way for me to be
blessed with fortune in both time and
space
So I trade my stagnant yearnings for a
switchblade sharp and learning, carving
out my own kinetic slice of
fate.
Chorus,
Chorus,
Repeate first verse.
End.
I know it is a tad convoluted but, it flows nicely when sung with the chord progression.
Any thoughts, help, suggestions? When I play it on the acoustic, it sounds good but, has no balls. I heard a powerful "band"song in my head, with all the parts of bass, drums and lead git giving the overall song some nuts but, I don't want to depend on that to write a solid tune.
Theron.