Down-Tempo Ethereal Ballad. Looking for mix critique.

[jghungerford]

I wrote and recorded this tune. I'm looking for mainly mix critique but all criticism is welcome! It features vox/slide guit/ synth pad/reverbial piano and bass. It's on my sound cloud as Nobody Knows.

Thanks
Jamey

http://soundcloud.com/user6790746

 

[joeym]

Very Floydish, not a bad thing.
The voice sounds pitchy at times and is too wet. I would pull back some of that verb and bring it closer, because it's too low in the mix. Arrangement-wise, it could do with some dynamics, with the pad going thru the whole song it tends to get tiring.

 

[jghungerford]

Definetely good critiques. Anybody else?