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ILL_Smurph
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Check out these tracks I did. If there is anything you think I need to work on, then please let me know 
www.mp3.com/c_flo
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www.mp3.com/c_flo
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theron
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Hey
Not my bag but, I'll listened to "what ever happened" and I'll pass my thoughts along.
All IMO. The vocal delivery was way stiff. Lossen the grip on the mic, put some phrazing and emphisis into it. Realize that you can always recut the track and bust it all out.
The refrain was kinda thin. The panning of the "what ever happened..." to the left was nerve bending. Maybe try a harder pan with the call and refrain being panned opposite each other. Put an some plate reverb on the call, leave the effect of the refrain as is. and get some backup tracks shouting out the same lines to beef it up and give it some emotion. This part could definitly use the introduction of a new insrument. Set it apart from the main body.
I think the song could build more with new elements and twists on the basic beat.
The lyrics certainly got the sentiment across but, some of the rhymes were contrived and clumsy. Maybe make it flow and explain why the seperation between you and your friends happened in more detail while cutting back on the street retoric.
Nice beat, solid tracking. You get a clean sound on the vox. And the sentiment of the lyrics is empathatic.
Hope that helps some,
Peace
Theron.
Not my bag but, I'll listened to "what ever happened" and I'll pass my thoughts along.
All IMO. The vocal delivery was way stiff. Lossen the grip on the mic, put some phrazing and emphisis into it. Realize that you can always recut the track and bust it all out.
The refrain was kinda thin. The panning of the "what ever happened..." to the left was nerve bending. Maybe try a harder pan with the call and refrain being panned opposite each other. Put an some plate reverb on the call, leave the effect of the refrain as is. and get some backup tracks shouting out the same lines to beef it up and give it some emotion. This part could definitly use the introduction of a new insrument. Set it apart from the main body.
I think the song could build more with new elements and twists on the basic beat.
The lyrics certainly got the sentiment across but, some of the rhymes were contrived and clumsy. Maybe make it flow and explain why the seperation between you and your friends happened in more detail while cutting back on the street retoric.
Nice beat, solid tracking. You get a clean sound on the vox. And the sentiment of the lyrics is empathatic.
Hope that helps some,
Peace
Theron.
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ILL_Smurph
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Thanks for the info. Thats not one of my best songs, but I'm definitely working on it.
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theron
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your welcome for the info. Did it help? Are ya gonna share your thoughts? How's about a listen and comment on someone else's tune.
Just trying to get you in the kharma groove of things
If you're gonna play, then play.
Peace,
Theron.
Just trying to get you in the kharma groove of things
If you're gonna play, then play.
Peace,
Theron.
King Elvis
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Youse gots skilz kid!!!
I like Rockin & Tossin
Cool old skool groove
nice clean recording
bass needs to be more slammin so does the kick drum
I can see you came to represent, cuz there isnt a whole lotta rap on here and its refresing to hear. Great rhymes but you need a little more feelin in the delivery
I like it though!!!
I like Rockin & Tossin
Cool old skool groove
nice clean recording
bass needs to be more slammin so does the kick drum
I can see you came to represent, cuz there isnt a whole lotta rap on here and its refresing to hear. Great rhymes but you need a little more feelin in the delivery
I like it though!!!