December Challenge - Burt

[Whatmysay]

Definitely 'First House/Flat' but probably an amalgam of many houses. Something about how it was 'built with love'.

But immediately as I write I get an image of a house haunted by memories of the past

Need a progression or a riff to give me direction.

Surfing the whole Yule tide vibe with a 5 and 3 y.o. means it could get very Christmessy.

 

[Whatmysay]

Found some chords and made a start, had it bouncing around in my head during the day

Transcribed from note book after about an hour italic are first versions crossed out bold are words undecided

1
The first house where we first kissed
We shared with a saxophonist
The rooms were smal the walls were thin
And could not hold our dreams within

2
The first house where we first loved
We lived beneath(below) a mad (crazy, old, drunk) landlord
The floorboards creaked the walls were cold
Our dreams kept us from the cold
The bed was big the carpet torn
Our dreams and shadows (bodies,sins) kept us warm

3
The first house where we dreamt of you
. . . . . . . and your sister too
The first house where you first dreamt
Was the last house where we paid rent
It looked out on a crystal sea
Then your sister made our family

Ch
You are my home
My heart your home

Mid8
something about now having a house thats a home, but love outlasting bricks and mortar?

Not sure this is the chorus
Contrary to popularly cited best practice I usually come up with verses first, not chorus. Thats possibly why my songs have weak chorus

 

[up-fiddler]

.....Not sure this is the chorus
Contrary to popularly cited best practice I usually come up with verses first, not chorus. Thats possibly why my songs have weak chorus

Best Practice is what works best.......for each of us individually.

On another note (Pun fully intended.) it looks as though we will have a few entrants in spite of the holidays.



Dave's Blog

 

[Whatmysay]

CH

My heart your home
Your heart my home

My arms are walls to keep you safe
This home is yours in our embrace
Though time will wear on castle stone
My heart is here always your home

 

[Whatmysay]

Take it to the bridge

A Middle 8 (Bridge) is escaping me - I can not get an alternative perspective on other lyrics might go for full 3rd person point of view - e.g.

There was a man . . .

I am addicted to bridges, but really need one as I am singing the ch up a full octave at the end so need to transition to it some how!