Critique Me? (Rap)

[waterise]

Main page:
https://soundcloud.com/rapperbvk

Song 1:
https://soundcloud.com/rapperbvk/whiteguyhighway

Song 2:
https://soundcloud.com/rapperbvk/deadlydesire

I mixed it myself...I use a headset that is headphones and a mic. all in one (bad, I know)....and I use the old Cool Edit Pro 2.1.
Ummm, how're my vocals? Should I of decreased the volume of them to mix it with the instrumentals better? I do everything my own and just rap over beats I find online.

Critique me on flow, delivery, etc., etc.
Thanks!

 

[bongoboy]

O.K., you asked for it...I think all rap is horrible. This is a shining example. You could at least put some effort into it and make your own beats. Maybe this should be in the appropriate forum. There are true connoisseurs there.

 

[Schwarzenyaeger]

O.K., you asked for it...I think all rap is horrible. This is a shining example. You could at least put some effort into it and make your own beats. Maybe this should be in the appropriate forum. There are true connoisseurs there.

Why would you start a critique with "I think that all x is horrible"? That says more about your inability to recognize the individual values of a genre than anything about the type of music.



Your rhythm on Deadly Desire is pretty good, your delivery is nice. There are a few stumbles like at 1:06 (stay-ing the same, too many syllables) or 1:50ish onwards, the fast parts. You have a clean rap voice. You kind of remind me of the guys that rap in Hollywood Undead.


White Guy Highway has a harsh sound on the vocal. It sounds like it's distorting gently. The beginning was incredibly corny. It sounded like you were trying to funny like Eminem but you don't have the attitude in your voice to pull it off.

 

[polarity]

I agree with Schwarz. All in all it's a pretty decent sound, your delivery is pretty good.

 

[bonnielegion]

I really enjoyed it.. your flow is good in pocket and your interesting to listen to. you have talent best of luck to you. keep doing this
bonnie legion
www.bonnielegion.com

 

[NotThatBright]

I can't condone any rap that isn't the Geto Boys first album. But hey, if you like it, godspeed, my friend. Keep at it. And turn off those fucking air raid sirens!