I agree with some of what rayc said. First though let me say I like the tune and the lyrics. I think the bass is lost in the mix and the vocals could use a little more "oompf". I think it could use some more mixing to even out the instruments and I personally don't think the reverb placed on the vocals works for this tune (not so much with the "angst driven" nature of the tune.
All just the opinions of a music lover, but total noob at recording and mixing myself. Take it for what it's worth. Can't wait to hear the next version!