Could you, would you?

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This is a metal song I have been working on for a couple days and my ears are burnt :D Take a listen if you can and let me know what you think.

The drums are going to be replaced, so they are pretty much a click track. real simple.

Vocals are up in the air. Trying for a certain effect and not too happy it at the moment. I normally try for very understandable vox, but....... Anyway let me know what you think. Could really use some opinions on this:)

It's called, we'll pay.

http://www.funnelhead.net/we'll pay.mp3

F.S.
 
A bass boost would lift it out of the solid mids of the guitars (is there actualy a bass in there?).
The riff is good, the vocal levels are fine as is.
the drums do need a bit more thought thought not too much complication.
Interesting lyrics.
This is developing well - good snap ending too.
 
Yes, I would....but no, I can't... :D

Hey Freud...Looking forward to having a listen when I return home in a week.
 
Nice guitar tone. Vocals sound a bit like Danzig...I like it. Everything has a great, dirty, grungy vibe. It's raw. I think the only thing that sounds out of place is the drums, and since you're replacing them, not a problem. I like the vocals like this...it sounds mean. :D
 
Cool song. Great guitar sound. Vocals sound very good. Only nit from me is the lack of bass prescence. It would be cool to hear the bass thumping along with the kick and guitars. All in all though, very nice. :)
 
rayc said:
A bass boost would lift it out of the solid mids of the guitars (is there actualy a bass in there?).
The riff is good, the vocal levels are fine as is.
the drums do need a bit more thought thought not too much complication.
Interesting lyrics.
This is developing well - good snap ending too.
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Thanks for the listen Ray, I will tweek the bass up some. It's there it's just meldong with the guitar too much I think. Drummer has a copy of the song without drums right now and hopefully we can get something done soon ;)

true-eurt said:
Yes, I would....but no, I can't...

Hey Freud...Looking forward to having a listen when I return home in a week.
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Hope you're havinf fun :D

Dogman said:
Nice guitar tone. Vocals sound a bit like Danzig...I like it. Everything has a great, dirty, grungy vibe. It's raw. I think the only thing that sounds out of place is the drums, and since you're replacing them, not a problem. I like the vocals like this...it sounds mean.
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Thanks Dogman, I was most concerned about the guitar & vocals. I get mixing distorted guitar and get happy with it, then 10 minutes later I'm no longer happy and screwing it up :D I've got to start pulling more referrance matirial when I get that way :rolleyes:

Don't think the Vocal effects are too much?

Thanks

Greg_L said:
Cool song. Great guitar sound. Vocals sound very good. Only nit from me is the lack of bass prescence. It would be cool to hear the bass thumping along with the kick and guitars. All in all though, very nice.
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Thanks Greg. Two for bass :D :eek: Ya I noticed it after mixing down. I will pump it up :) Still trying to get used to new monitors and I am a little gun shy. The bass is so clean on these asp8's... well it's different. There's no warning resonace to tell you to back down.


Thanks for all the input all! I really apritiate it :D I will pump up the bass and submit it for your review.

I am thinking of trying destortion on the vers vocals instead of the exiter I have on there now.. Any opinions? I find it very hard to use sucha heavey effect on vocals these days.


F.S.

Lyrics for those who like.



Fists line the broken wall
And bodies lay where it will fall

People will forget the day
And think it just turned out this way

But I still remember clear
The whispered lies that filled my ears

When suicide was not an option
Hate was held up for adoption

Chorus***********

It hurts me to hate you
It hurts you to hate me

But it was all I could feel
It was all I could see

As long as time is a debt
We’ll pay, but never be free

It hurts me to hate you
It hurts you to hate me

All hail the rise of man
And death that followed at his hand

Born with the will to fight
To satisfy his appetite

It’s only a question when
There’s never any question why

Step closer to the mirror
And look into the devil’s eyes


***** are those the worst lyrics ever or what :D ;) *******
 
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Dude, the guitars are sounding real cool. The bass could use more boosting. Unless you haven't added it yet. I can't tell 'coz it's a little late for me to turn the volume up by much. :)

The playing is pretty tight. Since you said the drummer is working on the drums, I'll leave the drums alone.

Melody is pretty cool. The guitars are just right once the vox kick in. In the beginning they sounded like they could use some support. Like bigger bass or doubling. :)

My opinion, of course.
 
bigbubba said:
Dude, the guitars are sounding real cool. The bass could use more boosting. Unless you haven't added it yet. I can't tell 'coz it's a little late for me to turn the volume up by much. :)

The playing is pretty tight. Since you said the drummer is working on the drums, I'll leave the drums alone.

Melody is pretty cool. The guitars are just right once the vox kick in. In the beginning they sounded like they could use some support. Like bigger bass or doubling. :)

My opinion, of course.
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Thanks for the input Bigbubba.

Did you listen to the second link down the page or the one at the top?

I'm hoping to record drums today or tomorrow.

F.S.
 
New mix sounds good. I guess the only think its lacking is some 'air'. The whole mix sounds sort of dark. Not much high-end prescence. That may be what you're going after, or maybe its juts the lack of cymbals. I'd like to hear it with the new drums. It's getting there though. Cool song. :)
 
Thank Greg. I backed off some of the main compression and it did seem to darken it some. I haven't thrown a multi-band comp on it yet either so that will give me some options as well. I think I am going to hold off for now because I hope to track drums soon. I'll see how that comes out and go from there.

I've got to try to get my drummers snare sounding decent before he shows up ;)

Thanks again

F.S.
 
Freudian Slip said:
Updated the file

Pumped the Bass up some. Couple other minor tweeks.
Let me if ya like it better.


http://www.funnelhead.net/We'll Pay bassup.mp3



F.S.
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The bass is there now. It sounds a bit heavy in the bottom end - that's just what I'm getting on my headphones. I'd like to check this on my speakers though cause my headphones are bass-y. Excellent tune overall FS - dark, heavy, raunchy, ominous - in other words perfect! I'll check it out when you get the drums done too.... :D
 
ido1957 said:
The bass is there now. It sounds a bit heavy in the bottom end - that's just what I'm getting on my headphones. I'd like to check this on my speakers though cause my headphones are bass-y. Excellent tune overall FS - dark, heavy, raunchy, ominous - in other words perfect! I'll check it out when you get the drums done too.... :D
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Thanks Ido:) I thought I may have gone a bit overboard :D

F.S.
 
The mix sounds pretty damn good. I like the guitar sound you got. But I really dont appreciate his vocals. Oh well nothing you can do about that.
 
DAS19 said:
The mix sounds pretty damn good. I like the guitar sound you got. But I really dont appreciate his vocals. Oh well nothing you can do about that.
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Well I could :D It's me. I'm not very happy with them either. I had a soar throat and was really straining to sing it. I may end up redoing them.
Not happy with the effects either.


F.S.
 
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