Could someone review my songs please?

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Hi everyone.
I have some new songs and would like some feedback from my fellow musicians so i can improve them.
So please someone kindly take a listen to my songs.
There not the best songs in the entire world but people seem to like them as they are doing well on an internet music site.
I have two songs at No1 and one at No2 and one at No7 and one at No9 in different genres on the same site. ok
But the feedback has been from listeners of music and NOT musicians. which is why i am posting here.
So your feedback is very important to me.
The link is here ok

www.betarecords.com/johnny

I look forward to you thoughts on my efforts.

Yours
Forever hopefull
Johnny
:o)
 
Hi Dirtyp

Hi there,
thanks for the feedback.
and yes i wrote the songs and produced the music in my studio.
I know the songs won't appeal to everyones taste which is ok. i put those different types of songs on my site to show i can do a variety if styles etc.
My voice isn't suited to all styles but i am a songwriter first and formost so for me it's the song idea more than anything else.
It's kinda difficult to make songs and mix them all on your own which is why the forums are so important to get the feedback so you can improve the songs.
I also took a listen to your songs.
The recording quality is great by the way. very clear with breathing space which helps both tracks. I enjoyed both songs.
The vocal IMO i would have lowered the volume slightly but thats just a matter of personal taste more than anything else.your voice is strong too which only adds to the songs potential.
Also to add warmth to the vocal and emphasize certains lyrics in the song you should consider doing a few more takes of the vocal. then adding them when needed to add to the songs in certain sections to enhance them etc.
I think you'll have no problem with both songs. i bet they sound good in the car!
If you do try enhancing the vocals do 2 more takes. sing them again twice. then pan them hard left and right and sit them way back in the mix so they blend in with the main vocal. so when the words come into the song with the extra vocals it adds warmth in a very natural yet subtle way that no chorus fx can give you. it's worth a try.
On the instrumentation look closely at it. try to add some new element every 8 bars. could be a hi hat or a single note string line. doesn't have to be much but what that does to the listener is keep there attention. so any variation however minor will help you to do that.
You played some piano on the tracks too which is always welcomed here as i'm a pianist so i enjoyed that for sure.
Well done. two very good tracks indeed.
I hope this helps
Johnny
 
Ahoy!

Great work!

Rich Girl:

I'd love to play my mandolin on Rich Girl. It would work. I guarantee. (I can see you recoling in horror .. haha .. but I could seriously play mandolin on it.)

It's not my genre either, BUT, I can see how this song could reach out to people. Think of the poor SOB that just got cheated on , he's driving in his car listening to Rich Girl .. it's perfect. (When you sing, "We could talk for hours" , the key change is nice.)

One thing though dude, that snare, well, man, it's *ahem* horrible.

If you can get those drums (or just the snare) sounding a little more realistic .. you'd have a great song on your hands there.

Good job on the singing, very clear and articulated.

Someday:

The drum samples sound better here. The cello is nice.

The secret to Someday, is that you should get a woman to sing it, or at least have her harmonize in the background or something. Think about it. ;-) I shit you not my friend. Many singers would LOVE to sing over this.

New Direction:

I see what you're going for here ... but when you sing the words: "Into a new direction", could you put some punch into it and sing it more agressively?

example: you need a NEW DIRECTION!!! Think of Janet Jackson flailing her arms to each syllable of "NEW DI-REC-TION"

The song would come off as having twice the energy if you did this .. and I wouldn't be surprised if it wound up being played at the local club!! Seriously. Think about it.

This one would also benefit from female backing.

The Road:

Great start! VERY emotional. It works. You nailed it. Good amount of reverb.

Your Beating Heart:

As a rock guy, that snare bothers me, but it's ok.

When you say "I need you more" .. say it with emotion and power man. Trust me.

This is a fine song however, it definately has comercial appeal.

There you go. Those where my 5 cents.
 
to tristan

Hi tristan,
thankyou so much for such a positive post.
I am so thankfull to you for taking the time and making such an effort to listen and then post me your thoughts on the songs.
Thankyou so much.
I sing the songs simply because if i didn't then who would? lol
Someday would work better with a female vocal in it i agree totally.
As for singing things a bit stronger i also agree with you.
for me. i posted my songs online to hopefully get feedback on the songs and not my vocal as i don't rate my vocals to be honest. i'm a songwriter but not a singer. too many fantastic singers around for me to call myself a singer i think. lol
your feedback has opened my eyes for sure and i promise you that i have taken notice of your comments and will look to improve the songs from your feedback and hopefully others will hear things in the songs that i missed to and let me know like you have so i can improve things with each song.
Many many thanks to you.
Take care
Johnny
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i will for sure.

I will for sure!
Thankyou so much for the feedback Tristan.
Johnny
:)
 
Hey Johnny

Just listened to Rich Girl. Did you auto tune the vox on it? or use any other unorthodox effects?

Cheers,

Steven
 
Hi Johnny. I'm new on this forum (just joined today), but I'm not new to music. Been playing my whole life, and writing for the last year or so. I like your music it sounds good! You have a nice electronica Depeche Mode sound going on, I dig it. If I were to offer you a piece of constructive criticism it would be to tone down the pitch correction especially in the song 'Rich Girl', the breaks are a little distracting. I think you have a nice baritone voice, you should let it shine for what it is!

Keep on keepin' on...sounds good!
 
Hi Danny and Steven.

Hi and thank you to both of you for the feedback.
Yes i did use a vox on the vocal.
At the time i recorded the demo the vocal was a ghost vocal from myself so i could arrange the music to it then soon after i finished the music i would have sung it again but i came down with the flu and ended up with a sore throat which is evident on the other song called The Road.
I would have liked to have done both with a clear throat but it never happened. but now that i'm feeling much better i will hopefully be re recording the vocal for Rich Girl without the vox! and The Road song should hopefully sound better.
Many thanks guys.
I hope this explains things for you.
Thanks.
Johnny
:)
 
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