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Very impressive. I think the chorus needs to be tighter, though. And I think it has absolutely nothing in this forum to do, however. Post stuff like this in the mp3 mixing clinic.
 
this ain't hip-hop... ok now for some praise and constructive criticism

THINGS I LIKE:
i liked the song structure, lyrics, and chord progression. using a rapper to provide the punch in your middle 8 isn't breaking new ground and your song doesn't need it, but it works.

NEUTRAL:
the lead and rap vocal placement in the mix, i'd actually drop it down a tad it seems to overpower the musical content.

MY 2 CENTS:
i would change the piano to a clav or rhodes and put more melodic expression into the piano part. the single finger melody you play during/after the rap REALLY, REALLY needs more oomph. spice it up because i hear where you are going but you don't quite get there.

the drum programming is OK but something isn't quite popping. i wish i could be more descript because i'm not really helping you if i can't articulate what i don't hear. i think it's the snare (or lack thereof). maybe try a little rim snare mixed in with the side-stick you are using.

i'd bring up the strings in the mix a bit... NO! on 2nd listen that's not it. stereo track the strings using 2 different string patches and pan them wide (not necessarily hard L/R but wide).

THINGS I'D LIKE TO KNOW:
1) what mic did you use to track the back vocals, and how many takes do you have mixed in to create the back vocals. your lead is clean and your back is dirty.

2) what drum machine are you using? when mixing did you do a 75hz cut on the drum kit and thereby remove the bottom or is it just the drum machine itself?

3) in what metro area do you live?
 
I hear potential, but not a complete song

I think the song itself is more then decent. The production, writing and arrangment were all on point. The lead vocalists performance could be better I think. He sounds like he can sing, but there where a lot of notes that where off in the lead vocal. Also the drums where almost non existent in the mix which is real no no considering the type of song it is. The drums are suppose to drive that song. For rock and ballads you can let the drums sit that low, but for a R&B/Hip-hop bounce track!! Its a contradiction in nature!!! Please bring up that kick and snare so we can bounce in the club to that. Peace.
 
I'm going to have to agree with everyone on the drum thing. I mean, it may be your group's style to have a larger amount of melody than beat... but it just sounded off... especially when you started rapping.

... I can almost see why you would put this in the rap section... almost...

All in all, nice piece digga. Turn the vocals down, or turn the beat up or something. Add some drums. Then gasshoppa... you weel be golden.
 
Yea what everybody else said!

I have a dial-up modem,so I can only judge the song itself.I thought that it was a really good song,loved the chord progressions,and the rap part was tight as well.I am in total agreement with everyone that the lead vocal need a little reworking,and the drums need to be turned up a notch.

All in all ,a very strong offering,and i look forward to hearing some other's.
 
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