can you understand me? diction/reverb review

[besthellbunny]

Hey guys,

I slapped together a rough tune (pardon the timing issues) and laid down some ideas for vox, which I am considering an "ok" guide track before I polish up the song comp and all the other stuff that needs work in the track...

a few ques tho, can you guys understand what I am saying? I am working on diction, and I know I might have made it worse with adding the verb...I have been reading lately that delay can be a better choice than reverb, so if you all say it's too touchy, I can revisit and play with the effects levels and the like.

https://soundcloud.com/besthellbunny/belly-of-the-beast-rough-loop3

I will paste the lyrics below but hopefully it is not necessary! please let me know. Any other feedback/opinions is also welcome! thanks!

youre slithering from the devils garden
i'm scrying sweetly within your scales

friend or foe? i must know,
and the devil's in the details

i've got to know, why you came
flinging spitfire when you speak my name
your forked tongue whispers that im the one

so now i'll get down on my knees
beside the belly of the beast
try to understand your visitation
your strange behavior my fascination

so now i'll get down on my knees
beside the belly of the beast
cast aside is my hesitation
serpents swaying, lead me to temptation

with slick stealth, and sharp fangs
movement fueled by hunger pangs

your desire to hunt your prey
will i become your meal today?

so now i know, why you came
flinging spitfire when you spoke my name
your forked tongue whispers that im the one

 

[VomitHatSteve]

Seems pretty clear. Your delivery is a little slurred tho.

 

[polarity]

In headphones I was having a little trouble, the reverb was drowning you out for me, and the vocal sounds like it is dropped in the middle of everything without clearing any room. Kind of muffled and in the background is what I got. Hope that helps