Can you guys check this song out?

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Hey Guys and Girls,

Can you check out my song so far....




It's not been mixed, and the vocals will be scrapped, but please tell me what you would do - based on what I do have done.

Any specific comments on the bass or drums would be great.

Thanks!
 
Change the strings on the first guitar.

Find a catchy riff/hook to play where that guitar just whangs the chords on the intro and every time after that. It's the spot for the big hook...you have three seconds before they hit 'stop' or change stations. Think of Beatle's "Day Tripper". Harrison was and is the guru of that thing.

The references for the tune I hear are Brit Invasion-era Stones...Brian Jones. More twang. Slightly bigger drums. Everything else, except some of the lyric, is a ringer for the '65 UK sound. Just open up the guitars' chunkitude, and try to be a bit more inventive with parts that just sit there. Like the intro that wants to be a big guitar hook. I think the vox is OK. Better than Mick.

I know you want mix advice, but there's stuff before that , that could use some work. I'm a geezer. In the 60's, I used to hear songs exactly like this by every group who want to catch the Beatles/Stones bus. They disappeared, and no one remembers their songs or names. So what y' gotta do is discover what, exactly, is was , that made Day Tripper and Get Offa My Cloud classics. Hook. Vocal and guitar....HOOKS. It's 10 minutes since I listened. I can't remember anything in it.
 
Cool song. :)

Jeff makes some good points. This reminded me at times of the Animals. Although I'm ok with the intro where the "whangs" are lively enough to get it going, I longed for some riffage later on.

There is one sort of squealing dual-note-bending guitar riff in the middle that really stood out to me as too modern sounding given the rest of the sounds, but I am listening on a laptop (which may also explain the lack of bass I experienced), so take that with an entire shaker of salt!:o:)

Liked the enthusiasm of the vocals which at times sounded just right, but at others just a bit off...another take (as you suggest) maybe just the trick.:)
 
Great tune dude. I enjoyed that a lot. Personally, I really dig the vocals as they are.

The only thing I wasn't nuts about was that weird synthy sound that popped in and out at various times, but that's definitely not a make-it-or-break-it thing.
 
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