Berserker - New VomitHatSteve original - Is this as big a mess as it seems to me?

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I'm not super stoked about how this mix has turned out so far, but I'll post it and see if you guys can help me improve it:

Berserker MP3 | FLAC
Mix 2: MP3 | FLAC
Mix 3: MP3 | FLAC

(Those vocal samples that I asked for earlier are for a remix of this.)

Obviously, feedback would be great!

Here I am in my vessel again,
wires running through my brain.
Months and years I've trained.
Barely keeps me sane.

Moves faster than my mind.
Fantastic curves and splines.
I cannot fall behind.
At light speed several times.

Gotta react before it happens.
Never never never never blink.
A symbiote of man/machine must
Never never never never blink.
They're gonna sterilize my homeworld.
Never never never never blink.
If I can't win a battle in hyperspace.

I dream of gods and war.
At the computers core.
Untamed heights I soar.
I fight forever more.

Fight for the galaxy.
Fight for humanity.
In the dark, eternal sea,
I fight for only me.
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The high end on the vocal sounds a bit hyped. Maybe cuz it's trying to get heard above other stuff in the mix that's got a kinda hyped upper end? Overall, I have an impression of too bright EQ on this one.
 
Hmm not bad. That buzzy synth sounds a bit too buzzy for my ears. The actual song writing and melody is pretty catchy. Nice job on that. I did notice that the intro kind of loses traction. At first it seemed like a discordant mess, but then I picked out the rhythm and caught it. Come to think of it, the whole song is very loose sounding. The last thing is the vocals are a bit thin. That's about it from me. :)
 
Thanks, guys.
OK. Version 2:
MP3 | FLAC

I re-cajiggered the synths pretty severely, dropped some "guitar" parts entirely, and turned a bunch of the other guitars up. I think it helped.
 
had a listen to both. the first mix has a fuller sound but the vocals dont sit right. also the bass guitar sounds a bit flappy. tighten up the bass and maybe give the vocals a little more low mids and they might sit a bit better
 
I listened many time and wrote down some thoughts as I listened.

Mix is very one dimensional. I don't feel any sense of space or separation.
I don't hear the bass... at all.
The synth solo at 1:39 is so much louder than everything else.
Mid low freqs are piled up high, need to notch out each instrument and give them their own space, freq and pan.
I think your vocal eq is used as an effect and I get that.

I always say this and I'm gonna say it again. Start with just kick, snare, bass and vocal and get those sounding good together. Then bring in everything else in a supporting role. I say that for typical rock songs, but I think it will work for your style as well. Also, listen to it loud and then listen to it soft; find the balance between the two.

Cool Steve!!!
 
A good song but it is, apart from the panned guitars, one dimensional. The bass seems to be an occasional thing.
Back to the mixing board I'm afraid - good song though.
 
Great feedback, everyone! Thank you!

Version 3:
MP3 | FLAC

I brought the bass up, significantly.
Panned the two distinct rhythm guitars about 30% left and right.
Notched 300-1000 Hz down a few DB on aforementioned guitars and then turned them up a bit overall.
Panned the vocal melody 15% left and the harmony 15% right.
Turned the guitar (what Chili called a synth) solo down a smidge and panned it out a bit when the vox come back in.

Baby steps! It's getting marginally better, I think.
 
the intro and a lot of the track seems a bit scattered rhythmically, try to match it to a click. do some editing or retrack. the snare needs it the most. the hihats are really low at start and the hits aren't very consistent.

up the vox a little
 
THe drums are a bit insane! And I am not sure about the scratchy synth. But I really liked the song. I realyliked the vocals and they can be turned up a bit. It is a catchy number!
 
Part Three & the Paper Walls
If you get a chance to do a net search for an Australian band The Thought Criminals & their second LP You Only Think Twice you'll find something close to what you seem to be aiming for - it was slightly post punk with prog leanings but retaining the punk playing style & thud bass.
This is better than the previous mix mate & I quite like it.
 
THanks guys.

Thanks for the recommendation, Rayc. I'll look into that band.

You guys really think the vox are too quiet still? Huh. I guess I'll revisit that then.

BTW, I re-comped the drums in mix 3 and re-uploaded it this morning. They should be a little tighter now.
 
Cool synth line and melody VHS - the whole tune has a real Devo feel to it. The guitars are quite fizzy and the drums a bit lost in the mix, but I would imagine this is a real tough one to mix. I admire your ambition :cool:
 
Thanks, Rob. Yeah, I do find these mixes pretty tough. I mean, I could probably make it easier on myself by not having a dozen instruments going at a time, but where would the fun in that be!

:D
 
Well it’s pretty wild to me. I think it’s the first time I’ve seen the word spline in a song.

I heard mix three and immediately got a vision of cowboys and Mexicans riding hell bent for leather toward the Alamo.

Anyway happy birthday youngn’
 
Thanks, Manslick!

Heh! I'm actually pretty proud of the vocabulary in this one! "Symbiote" is another good one you don't hear often. (Though my spell check assures me it's not a real word, so maybe there's a reason for that!)

"Gallops" is sort of the rhythmic theme for a lot of the stuff I've been working on recently. Which is interesting, because I'm not very good at them.
 
Put this eq on the kick: -6dB 1 octave @63Hz. Maybe bump up a little at 3 or 4kHz or wherever the snap is. Brighten the snare slightly (6kHz?).
 
OK, BSG. I'll try to find some time to try that tomorrow.
 
I think this is a great song. It sounds good to me in a quirky Devo kind of way. I think the drums could use some work but beyond recording and mixing technique the song is good. Id like to hear more of your stuff.
 
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