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jamal buchet

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ok so im posting an mp3 for lyrics....its very short one verse , chorus...i have been kickin this around for a coupla mths now...the chorus sounds really corny to me......i dunno lemme know what you think..
http://www.nowhereradio.com/mynewhead/singles

its under"songwriting forum"

jamal
 
man jamal...that sounds like it was recorded using a $4 fisher-price sing-a-long recorder and a couple of rubber bands.

Wait, what was the question???

The chorus is farkin' fine. I dig internal rhymes. I need more context. Wait a minute, you TOTALLY RIPPED OFF MY 'DECEMBER' SONG!!! You used "these" and "days"...oh man, and I thought you were cool.

:D
-chris
 
Give me all the lyrics!!

What I heard was well put and the subject matter was chalked full of T-n-T. The emotion and placement of the words worked well but, it was a short clip with plenty of room to fuck it all up or make it shine..............

I've a spinal sence that the rest of the song lyrics live up to this snippet.

I realise that we are treading thin and new ground with posting audio links to the lyrics but, the lyrics also include the structure of the song (i.e. chorus, bridge or lack thereof) and I've written many o'song that has a pleasing first verse and I've managed to kill the please as the verses went on...........


Theron.

I hope you read the last paragraph as the (none specific to your song but, incumbent of its nature) that it is.;)

Peace,

Theron
 
thanks theron,
but in truth the reason all i posted was the first verse and chorus..is that i thought it sounded so sappy...maybe its just me..almost on the verge of (gulp)..and no disrespect to mr chrissharris or anything..country/folk-ish-ey...and as such..(only having a verse/chorus)..was relatively easy to rec-post quickly just to try out this new format we were talkin about....maybe others will follow..*hint*..

(oh yeah i dont remember what thread it was but i never laughed so hard in my life as when you and shoot i dont rem who it was ...were having the infamous"you should change yer name to peace-theron"...oh my god!!!...that was soooooo funny

may you all kiseth my ass
jamal...........lmao
 
I don't want you cats to start talking around and over me too much...so please 'splain what "T-n-T" means in your post, Mr. Peace Theron.

Thanking you kindly in advance for lessening the obvious nature of my ignorance.

-chris
 
i beleive its "toast and tea"..and olde english euphamism for..."HOLY CRAP..WHY DOESNT SOME MAJOR LABEL OFFER THIS GUY A DEAL??!?!?!).......pretty sure thats what it is..



eddie vedder sings it better
jamal
 
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