Any ideas for pre chorus lines?

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I'll make a stab at it, Getahgrip.
I liked the lyrics of your song the first time I read them, way back when.

I can't promise anything, mainly I've never worked on someone elses song before. I've been sitting here putting a tune to it, (I need a base to start from) and have some ideas that may fit.
I also feel a bit strange working on someone elses song, not legal stuff, but expectations. My style of writing comes all at once, not in bits and pieces, so this is a challenge to me. I need music or it sounds like poetry, and to me poetry is the hardest thing to put music to.
You've a definate talent for wording your thoughts.
I'm more of the crude blunt type. But the lyrics you wrote have a link with my past and I really like them. So, I'll try to do something to help ya out, and myself.
Gimme a few days. I don't have one of those 9-5ers, so my time is basiclly my own. Besides, I need a challenge to get my act together.

Oh, one thing. Your talking about, "You Stayed"? Right?
 
Thanks BG. I have no expectations, just a bit of a cranial block! Every time I go back to that song I keep hearing Stone Cold and it throws me outta the origionality pool.
Shoot something out if you get time. Worst case is that I use it, make a million bucks and haul ass willing you my collection of Linkert carbs! :D
 
Hi Getuhgrip.

I came up with several but here are two.
The hardest part was putting some music to your song so I could get the feel of it. To me, without music, they are only words.

Anyway, the two intro's are sandwiched between the second verse and chorus, one above the other.

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Promised that I'd always love you.
Put my young boy days away.
But the party-man went on and on.
Creeps through the doors at dawn.
How'd you hold on.

(((Time after time, the lies)))
(((Again and again, you cried)))
(((Over and over, the hurt in your eyes)))
(((Yet)))

(((Over and over, the lies)))
(((Time and again, the alibi’s)))
(((But through it all,)))


You stayed.
Crying alone while I played.
Hoping that someday I'd change.
You stayed_and now
Let me clean up the mess that I've made.

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Carbs huh? I've a good use for them.
Fill 'em with water at different levels and use a small mallet to tap out some tunes. I figure I could adjust that flapper thingie in the throat (the name of it escapes me at the moment) to change the tone and enhancement. Perhaps by putting a mic inside each carb, in the water, the sound vari,,,,,,,,,

Seriously, that's some good lyrics you have there, Get. I barely remember Stone Cold. But the more I fiddled with your song without the music I added, the more Stone Cold seeped in. Power of suggestion. I know what you ment. That's happened to me before.

Anyway, Hope you do something with your song whether you use my additions or not. I'd love to hear your song, the way you did it.

Was fun. Thanks.
 
you stayed pre-chorus

well, I read this post and went away.
Then I found myself trying to write a pre-chorus whether I wanted to or not. The interal dialoge does what it wants most of the time.
Here is my input. Hope it helps and please share the final lyrical and musical outcome of this tune.


(It's amazing that you're still around.
A lesser friend would be long gone.
I'm dazed by the loyalty I've found.
It's amazing..)

You Stayed.




Edit at will and let me know how the juices of inspiration were stirred by this thread and all its responses.

Peace,
Theron


After posting, I noticed that badges and I used the same rhyming pattern. This might be an indication as to how you should aproach it. And it could be a direction to run from.
 
This sucks!

I keep hearing "Searching in the darkness....."
"Love was here and gone, like a theif in the night."

I can't record (no drums or sound card right now) squat until right after christmas. I'll play with the lines you both gave.
What I'll do first is record what I've got with the music I'm using and post it.

I didn't know how to explain "pre-chorus" to dobro when he asked. Ya'll go listen to Rainbow's tune. I want some lines that cut away from the main body and rhythem leading into the "You Stayed" chorus.

I hope I'm not coming across as ingrateful dick. I appreciate you guys taking the time, but I think you'll see what I'm talking about when I post the song.

Thanks guys.
Rick (only rhymes with dick!) :D
 
Hi Getuhgrip.

Absolutely no offence taken. Knowing what you want makes a whole new light on the subject.

I want some lines that cut away from the main body and rhythem leading into the "You Stayed" chorus.
Click to expand...

That helps in knowing what direction to focus on.

Oh, since what I posted isn't what you wanted, don't waste your time posting it. 'K? I'm not interested in hearing something you don't want. Use your time for more important things.

I'll try again. Give me a few days.
 
Hey Get.
Just want you to know I'm still coming back to your song now and then and working on a pre-chours.
It's harder than I ever though, especially without the music.

I have two words written down so far. :eek: J/K.

Soon I'll have a few thing for you to look over. I'm trying to come at that chours from several different angles, thus giving you a wider field to look at.

Just keeping you in mind,
And spending my time,
Slowly building you a line.
When I should be sitting here working on mine. :D

Later m'friend.
 
badgas said:

Just keeping you in mind,
And spending my time,
Slowly building you a line.
When I should be sitting here working on mine. :D
Click to expand...


ROFLMAO! :p
 
getuhgrip,

I took a stab at your pre-chorus. Not too sure about how it fits without knowing what the melody will be when you stray from the main melody into the pre-chorus. Anyway here goes.

Promised that I'd always love you.
Put my young boy days away.
But the party-man went on and on.
Creeps through the doors at dawn.
How'd you hold on.

(( For years everybody told me ))
(( I did not deserve you))
(( Now looking back I can see ))
(( Thats always been true))
(( But... ))

You stayed.
Crying alone while I played.
Hoping that someday I'd change.
You stayed_and now
Let me clean up the mess that I've made.


Its like badgas said, its kind of odd working on someone else's song. But maybe I might give you another avenue.

<><
George
 
Hi George.
Haven't seen you in a while.
Everything ok on your end?
Good to see ya. ;)
 
Thank guys, George, BG.

I've been dragging my tail getting the music machine up and running but I'm gettin' close.
It's difficult for me to work on lyrics while concentrating on hardware. There's only so much brain power to go around these days!

I'll be back in the game shortly, and hopefuly the recording computer will be a "turn-key" situation devoid of yet another extreme learning curve!

Thanks again y'all and have a great week. :cool:
 
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