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Hi all...Just finished this tune. I wonder how it sounds. Drums might be too loud and or/compressed? I didn't think I compressed them any more than usual, but they sound compressed for some reason. Anyway, as usual, all feedback is helpful...thanx.

Writing's on the Wall
 
RAMI said:
Hi all...Just finished this tune. I wonder how it sounds. Drums might be too loud and or/compressed? I didn't think I compressed them any more than usual, but they sound compressed for some reason. Anyway, as usual, all feedback is helpful...thanx.

Writing's on the Wall
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Hey Rami,

Overall listening on my pc speakers not bad, a few little points of constructive criticism:

The vocals with the back up needs to be slightly lower in volume at the 00:52 mark, just a tad in ya face compared to the rest of the vocal track!

The drums in regards to the snare and toms seem a little flat sounding, maybe a boost in the mids slightly and more bottom in the kick!

The guitar tone and playing is sweet, the lead break tone of the guitar is a little on the high pitched side, maybe drag the high-mids down a touch!

All the above comments are designed to be constructive!

Once again Rami...Nice Work! :)

Kev
 
Cool classic rock feel man. Love the guitar work and tones. There's a catchy groove going.
I'm not sure about compressed drums, but they do sound like a little more punch/attack would benifit the sound. On the snare I'm thinking. Maybe put more punch on the snare then lower the whole sound a tad, if that makes sense.
I really like the 3:51 section, I think that'd sound cool to even expand on that some. Maybe a longer outro with some layered building guitar arpeggios or something... I don't know, just some thoughts/ideas.
Anyway, excellent tune man :D Enjoyed it. Your stuff always rocks my system! Meaning your songs always sound excellent on my system, Cheers ;)
 
Damn!!! Rami's back!!!!
Nice sounds man. I really dig the bass tone on this. Drums don't seem over compressed, at least to me. You could try and give them more life, and see what happens to the snare. Not sure if it would stick out too much. Give it a try, and see what happens. Might bite too much, and really suck. I hear what Gorty said about the vocals during that part of the chorus. Sometimes they get a bit bright. Maybe simply panning some of that part would fit...I don't know. This blows away so much stuff, that it's hard to critique. If I recorded something like this, I'd be exstatic!!! I know for you, this is normal, So I try and pick at it as much as possible. I'd say you have 2 small nits, for every 98 good parts. Not a bad average, man...and good tune. And like I said, the bass tone is awesome. I love how it sits.
Ed
 
Damn, those are some quick responses. Thanx guys.

Making the drums more punchy is not a problem, I actually thought they might have been to much for a non-drum dominated song. I'll try it.

Just to be sure, I think Gorty was refering to the lead vocal that is sustaining that annoying note right before the chorus. If that's the case, then I hear it too. It's not so much that it's louder, it's that I probably sang it in a nasally voice concentrating too much on hitting and sustaining it. So it sticks out.

Good ears, guys, don't know what I'd do without you's.
 
Listening on my groovy AKG headphones...

I like it, I like the vocals. For me they could be a lil fuller sounding, not sure how to accomplish that though. Reminds me of Alan Persons or something like that. I like the vocal effects.

To me, this is one of those RARE songs that I wish wasnt so polished. Seriously. Its a great song and a great job, I wish it had a lil more grit to it, a lil harder edge. Make sense :confused:

Excellent stuff, very impressive.
 
Makes total sense, David. Rather funny that the first song that I didn't hold back on the effects makes you say you wish it was less polished...hehe...I am always scared of sounding too "over-produced". I an 80's-a-phobe. :)
So, you got me thinking that I should do a "smaller" version of this. I like a less polished sound, too, in general...thanx
 
RAMI said:
Makes total sense, David. Rather funny that the first song that I didn't hold back on the effects makes you say you wish it was less polished...hehe...I am always scared of sounding too "over-produced". I an 80's-a-phobe. :)
So, you got me thinking that I should do a "smaller" version of this. I like a less polished sound, too, in general...thanx
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I'd like to hear a "Bar Band" Rami version. Your raw stuff smokes, man. And dude, good to see you back.... :D
 
Rather funny that the first song that I didn't hold back on the effects makes you say you wish it was less polished...hehe...
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No, I love the effects. Its hard to put my finger on it as I am a huge fan of producing and overproducing :p Thats why I said RARE... Listening again...

Its definitely catchy. OK, I think I can word what I am thinking:

It sounds like Night Ranger. I want Blue Oyster Cult or Deep Purple ;) To me, the material sounds a lil harder than the sound, which I reckon you could get with a fuller sound :confused: Anyhoo the second listen is even better, its a first rate job and its leaving a strong impression.
 
Rami,
I love the tone of the early lead guitar - not over effected - still sounds like a guitar!!
The song sounds like it could turn monster BOC or rock pop depending on treatment. There are strong elements of BOC without the sinisterness.
This is a really good demo package because it lends it's self to imagination & interpretation. Now, if I've offended you with that comment- I apologise but each time I listened I heard another "treatment" in my head.
Is this a solo recording or a band piece?
It also reminds me of classic Greg Kihn Band from around the Beside Myself single - early 80's.
Top work & top song
Cheers
rayC
 
Cool tune it really takes of at the harmony parts, I dident really get into it before the first harmony part, then I started to get familiar agian.
The drums are very nice and dry, but I think its to dry for this tune, it needs more dirt, on drums and Bass, IMHO.

Exelent playing, cool lyrics.

Good work buddy. :)
 
Noisewreck, thanx alot.

Rayc and Nak, thanx guys. To answer Ray's question, it's not a band, just me. I agree that there would be so many ways to treat this tune. There are a few things I have to re-do as it is anyway. I'm going ot try to dry up the reverb a bit and see if it sounds better a litte more raw. Thanx guys.
 
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By the way one thing I forgot to mention is that I think you`re seriously startin g to develope a sound.
I mean a sound that makes it easy to say, hey thats Rami.
Congrats on that, most of my faves have theire own sound.

Your work is really high quality, and I`m very gald that you share it with us who still needs tons of work on our material. :)

and last I`ve said this before and I`ll say it a again your drumming kills.

I`ve had a few beers, but still.
You rawk ramster and I`m really glad your back full time. :)
 
Really like the vocals on this...guitars have a really up front sound to em' which sounds really cool as well...agree with a previous post that the drums are maybe a bit dry..maybe a bit of verb would add some depth to the overall feel of the song.Man this is great...awesome job Rami!
 
Hi Rami -


I'd like to hear more guitars in general - something cleaner and strummed might give the song a little more movement, much like a tambourine might. But more guitars in both quantity and volume



Nice fill at 1:23, and fantastic change at 2:18.

Nice instrumental section into the stacatto verse at 2:53. Big fill at 3:13 - very tight.



Great song, Rami. Like Naka said I think you're really starting to find your stride.

-Casey
 
Rami, I think I like this has become my favorite tune of yours now.

It is a bit different from the others.

The vocals are excellent. I like the lyrics. I really love the guitar in this. :cool:

Great song!!!!

Love you....TRUE :)
 
Nak, thanx alot buddy. I like you when you drink.:)

Variaxman, I always appreciate your comments, coming from a guit-maestro like yourself.

Supercreep, I hear what you mean about something strumming or moving the beat a bit more like a tamborine. I think I hesitated to do that (i actually did a clean guitar track but didn't use it) because it's already verging on middle-of-the-road-ness in the verses. So i wanted to not get too far away from a more raw 4 piece band sound. But I hear it too. Thanx for listening and commenting with so much detail.

True, thanx alot. I'm glad you're back around here listening again. We missed you most of the winter.
 
I could get every other song of yours to play except the one ya want feedback on. Dont know why,...no matter what,.. it will not play.
I liked "Scars". Real good lyric writing,..verses were very well thoguht out. Didnt care much for the chorus parts though. Mix seemed right on,..so if "Writing's On the Wall" is like that than,...sounds pretty good.

Sorry man,..gave it a try.

Take 'er easy,..
Calwood
 
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